Okay, I don't normally like people changing things (like how Harry defeated Voldemort) from JKR's version, whether they were written before DH's release or not.
But this story is simply fabulous, absolutely brilliant! I love how you changed the final battle scene into something just as intriguing, the events during the story just seem so realistic and very easy to imagine JKR's characters doing exactly what you have made them do during the course of the story.
Wonderful, I can't fault it! Well done!
I clicked on this story because it was different - a lot of stories are basically about the same thing, just told differently. I think its good how you've taken something completely different from the rest and made it fit in well with the story.
I am one of 5 children, and myself and my father are the only ones in my immediate family who do not suffer from asthma. When I was little, it was scary when one of my siblings or my mother couldn't breathe, and I didnt know what to do. I am now qualified in first aid, even though I am only 17. It makes me feel much better that if something does happen, that will be able to help them.
Again, well done, I look forward to seeing what happens next
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I have to thank Vindictus Viridian for initiating the Written Word Challenge 2009 on the Beta Boards which urged us all to write about a cause close to our hearts and setting it in the Potterverse.
Hopefully the next chapter will be up before the end of term.
Well done you for taking a first aid course so you know how to deal with people in this situation. Awareness and help is so important.
Thank you again for the review. I do appreciate it. Carole xxx