Hello, Roxy

Well here's a review from someone who loves Remus/Tonks with a passion, and writes about it far too much to be healthy. Anyway, what can I say? First of all, I think you've captured Tonks very well. The way she has no clue that her powers would be so badly affected by loss is an excellent idea. I'm just flirting with this idea that she'd be afflicted by depression, so I'm interested to read your take on this. I love her declaration at the end. She is, after all, an earthy, feisty character and after the reflective tone of the piece, her passion shines through. I was very pleased to see other charcters, like Molly, being brought into the story. It emphasizes the relationship between the two women. Molly may have been a lot older but they were friends.

I have a few nit-picks.
He’s lost so much and I don’t think he would be able to take loosing something else. You mean losing, I think.
Patronus and Marauder should be capitalised, I believe.

However thery're all incredibly minor points, and in no way detract from the overall tone of the piece. This was written before DH, I presume, because they're alive at the end with two children and no sign of Teddy. I love how they're happy, and that right at the end Tonks has to slip into strict mum mode. After all the angst she's been through, it's lovely to see her having a relatively normal and happy life. *Darn, you, JK, for killing off my OTP!*

Carole

OHH, wow. This is mesmerising. I don't read a lot of D/A or AU fics really, they're not usually my bag at all - but this is very well written (your gift for description and imagery is outstanding - mine is awful so I do love reading someone who writes it well without being too flowery). It is also a very original story- I was NOT expecting Ginny to be a Horcux - that shocked me and made me so sad because then they couldn't be together.

A very well executed story - well done.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading, and especially thanks for reviewing. You rock my socks. I'm glad you enjoyed it and your comment flatters me. I hope you read more sometime :) Thanks again.

Of course Nobody expects the Spanish Inquisition because their chief weapon is surprise- nothing else just surprise! (and Fear and a fanatical devotion to the Pope).
Sorry I could go on all night- I love MP and I love your blog (Sorry I mean The Dark Lord's blog - you being the mere ghost.) I can't quite believe I've only just got round to reading it.

Author's Response: Bahaha, thank you so much! It's always fantastic to get new readers.I recognize you from the Mad Lib, young lady! (And yes, I do love my Monty Python.)

*Giggles a lot* You know, Whit, I have read this before but not sure if I've left a review. I often steer away from Marauder because as I write it myself I tend to think it will skew my own fic or I'll nick ideas (without meaning to -she adds hastily). However I do like this. I love your OC's because they're not perfect Mary-Sue's but have flaws and some of them are a bit dim (hee hee). I envy people that can write good OC's so hats off to you.

YES! to Sirius singing Night Fever - you've got the era right so extra bonus point from me as that's a pet peeve of mine.

Mind you one of my guilty pleasures is seeing Pettigrew look foolish so I couldn't stop laughing out loud (literally) when he walked into the wall. And Lily and Remus walking ahead of the weirdos is fabulous.
Talking of Lily, I do like the awkwardness with her and James. It's obvious she doesn't hate him anymore and he plainly adores her so I'm crossing my fingers that he gets his girl soon.

Sam seems a bit of an enigma. I can't make up my mind whether I'm going to like him yet, so I'll have to read on...

I also like Kirsty's bag and her nails with Mugle Lover on *giggles or should that be gigles*. Couldn't she have put two 'g's on one nail hee hee.

Small nit pick (I'm not a beta so you're safe)

“Hey, Northy!” cheered James Potter. James, famous for his talent on the Quidditch pitch, was the object of many girls' fixations, with his messy mop of black hair, hazel eyes that were framed by a pair of black glasses, and a mischievous grin that was to die for. He pretty much had his own fan base amongst the girls of the school. He was, quite plainly, a bit of a catch. “James,” replied Sam, nodding to his fellow Gryffindor.

There should be a space between James' word and Sam's words.

All in all, very enjoyable read, but now, dang it, you've hooked me in and I'll have to read it all.

Happy Easter. Carole xxx

Author's Response: Yay! Hello, Carole! I know what you mean with steering away from Marauder Era fics, I tend to do it too for the exact same reasons, and also because I'll probably find some really awesome ones that'll make me want to give up on this one lol.
I'm glad you liked my OCs, they're always the most worrying part.

Yeah, Kirsty gets all the cool stuff lol *envies the bag*.

Thanks so much, Carole, for the great review. I'm sat grinning away now, I bet I could even give our very own Cheshire Cat a rune for her money :p.

~Whit

This is an interesting story about a much underused, and often maligned, character. I like how you've made Lavender reasonably strong throughout the piece. She may be shallow and superficial but she's got her man and she wants to keep him. What is it about Ron, I wonder, that makes her fight to keep him when she knows he wants out? In an odd way, odd because others' opinions seem to matter so much to her, Lavender's love (?) for Ron stands out as something not affected by public opinion. The Patil twins, for instance, think she should be trying to get Dean back. I like the fact that she knows her limits and realises that trying to tempt Dean away from Ginny would be fruitless.

I love the allusions to the rain clouds all the way throughand the last two lines are extremely good.

Hello there, Pooja, my love. I'm here to review another of your stories. Well, let's start by saying that this was fun. A nice light hearted fic that deals with that silliest of sins - vanity.

I adored the little details you brought into the story, especially the description of the hairstyle and the intricacies of the potion. Very well done.

I have a few issues with Ginny, who does seem a bit self-obsessed. However, if she's missing Harry that much then I suppose she might get a bit desperate. She seemed rather too vain for a girl who's generally charging all over the Quidditch Pitch. But, I realise this was a story written for a challenge and so I did take the characterisation with a pinch of salt. (and she was rather funny hee hee).

Hermione was well drawn. Knowledgeable, and not just about spells but about relationships too. She was how I picture her. I think you may need to look at some of the phrasing when she speaks. She sounds a bit too formal at times. This works well when she's talking about the potion that they are brewing - because Hermione is a bit of a show-off and does come across as a teacher in canon. However when she's speaking to her friend, I think she'd be less formal.

It was a good fable though. Well done.

~Carole~

Author's Response: Hey Carole! Thanks for the review. I totally agree with Ginny's characterisation. I really wasn't sure of how to carry on this challenge without making her a little OOC, though, so I just stuck to it. And Hermione's speech... well, when I wrote this, I was less conversant with English slang, and frankly, in India, speaking in English means being sorta formal. Hehe. Now I've learned, though. :) *hugs*

OH MY WORD! What a fantastic story. I've only just caught it and I'm so glad I've been able to read it in one sitting. If I'd had to wait for chapters I'd have chewed my fingernails off by now. I think I've read all your stories now and I love your writing. You have an incredible way with words. Your characterisation is superb and your descriptions are amazing. Brilliant as always.

Author's Response: Oh thank you! Your review made my day! :)

Wow!
This whole series is truly wonderful. I've just read the whole lot in one go and am very pleased I haven't had to wait for updates. I loved the first chapter- you portrayed all four children superbly. Orion and Sirius' relationship was lovely. Orion never gets a look in usually. As for Recognition:- I was spellbound. Your description of the battle was wonderful. How you managed to keep the tension going all the way through was.... well I've run out of superlatives now. BRILLIANT!

I love your dialogue. That scene in Transfiguration when James is partnering Lily is just superb. I can't stop smirking.

Author's Response: Thanks. I basically make people in my stories the way me and my friends talk ourselves (or the way we would if we could think on our feet quick enough) so thanks!

Hurry up with the next chapter! This is so good.

Author's Response: It\'s in the queue, don\'t worry. I\'m glad you\'re enjoying it!