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10/31/07

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My name is Chris.
I'm a vegetarian, environmentalist, and novelist.
That's enough.

Sadie Murray is being slowly completed.
Excuse life for debunking my haste.

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Patrick Thatcher and the Colonist's Compass by Dean Thomas

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Patrick Thatcher’s older brother teases him, his mother worries about him, and his father defends him. His family sounds very much like any other, but somehow Patrick’s is far from average. In Patrick’s world, adults disappear into thin air, owls deliver mail, and the most popular sport in the country is played on broomsticks. Not to mention that every member of his family is, and always has been, a wizard. When your grandfather is a famous American veteran, being a Thatcher isn’t the easiest life to live. When his acceptance letter to the most prestigious American school of magic arrives addressed to another student, Patrick’s position in his former world begins to take a tumble—right along with the newly elected President of Magic’s approval ratings. With the Wizarding world’s eyes shifting toward a new wizard, can Patrick figure out just why his first year is off to a rocky start? Inspired by J.K. Rowling’s wondrous Harry Potter Series, Patrick Thatcher’s adventures of wizardry in the United States is a tale all its own while still respecting its English origins. Readers are sure to find that the magic across the pond is just as unforgettable.

Reviewer: star_sailor Signed
Date: 11/23/07 Title: Chapter 3: Agnomon Square

That's hilarious! In my story, I had made the uniforms navy blue too. Maybe it's an American thing? And I almost called the government The Republic too. Word for word.

But I digress; this is quite good. I'm enjoying the progression. I'll be sure to read more soon!

Truth by Mistletoe

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: He looked down at this feet and let out a faint laugh. “You know Tonks, you’ve got a lot in you. I’ll see you around.” And with a smile and a wink of the eye, Remus Lupin vanished.

Reviewer: star_sailor Signed
Date: 12/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really enjoy this. I like how well you captured the Order; that is exactly how I pictured their meetings.

For the record, in the 5th paragraph,you left she out of the first sentence. [b]When had seen him fall slowly through...[b]

And this is just something curious I thought of, but might the scourgify spell not make the noodles disappear because of Gamp's Laws? Just food for thought (pun unintended but accepted.).

Author's Response: I\'m glad you think I captured the meeting well; it was something I really tried hard for. As for the little nit-pick, I\'ll go fix it right away. And Gamp\'s Law is what exactly? *goes to look it up* Heh, nice pun. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: star_sailor Signed
Date: 12/02/07 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Yet again, very good. How you worked in the arrival of Dumbledore and Harry was seamless. I also like how you kept the awkward bumblingness of Tonks throughout all the chapters, along with her brashness. The only thing I would like to see in this chapter is for more conversation between Tonks and Molly.

Regardless, I really enjoyed this. If you are going to continue this, that would be glorious; I'd love seeing it progress further.

Author's Response: Thank you :] It\'s been quite abandoned, I must admit. But it will be continued. I don\'t intend to finish it so suddenly at all.

'Twas The Night Before The Yule Ball by Gmariam

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Harry receives some solid advice from a friend on the eve of the Yule Ball.

This poem was written by Gmariam of Ravenclaw for the December Challenge. It is for the third prompt, a parody of a Christmas Carol.

Reviewer: star_sailor Signed
Date: 12/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Visit from Hagrid

This poem is all kinds of the following:
Great
Cute
Amazing

This was really one of the best poems/Christmas stories I've heard. It faltered a bit on some of the first lines, but only a few times, and you kept it moving. Such a good job!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I\'m so glad someone is reading this a year later!! ~Gina :)

Merlyn's Story by Phia Phoenix

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: History is full of people who have gone uncredited- or it would be. Merlyn, a notorious trickster in her sixth year at Hogwarts, belongs to this category.
This is the story of that fateful night in the Astronomy Tower, seen through the eyes of a young Hufflepuff witch, for whom the world will never seem the same.

Reviewer: star_sailor Signed
Date: 07/10/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was nice! I always like stories that portray the canon incidents at a different angle. And Merlyn personality fits nicely. It's also refreshing to hear from the Hufflepuffs; they never get enough credit. I just wish it was a tad longer! I really enjoyed it - you did quite a good job.

Author's Response:

Thanks! I would have liked to make it a bit longer, but it was a school assignment (as in, for my RL school) and there was a cap on our word counts. Yesh, I liked experimenting with a Puff, too! :D

Thanks for the review!

~Phia

Little Things by lucilla_pauie

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: There are those ‘little things’

that could bridge the chasm of time,

fan dying embers,

burst into flame,

and bring a heart to touch another heart.*

~This is LucillaJoanna of Hufflepuff sipping cocoa and waxing poetic By the Fireside for The Winter Tales Challenges

Reviewer: star_sailor Signed
Date: 12/12/07 Title: Chapter 1: All chasms bridged

First, the silly little typo. When Percy hugs his dad, you went into the bit about how he was jumping over the stream. Well, somehow Percy seems to have skinned his knee IN the rock. "...when he had skinned his leg in a rock in the pond."

Dang typos! It's so small, I'm shocked I noticed.

That being said, this is a wonderful story. It's really great to see this side of Percy. He was always so huffy, and it's nice to see him let that go for once. You capture the mood superbly, and I love the way you put forth imagery. It's very strong. "The granite crumbled into sand. Love was like that." Mmm! Tasty! Great job.

Author's Response: Oh dang prepositions, too. Thanks, Chris! ^_^

Monsters Under The Bed by Mistletoe

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: "It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live."

A wise man had once told Harry Potter this simple phrase. Harry, in turn, passed on this advice to a brooding Teddy, who suffers once again as the Christmas holidays approach. More than he shows, the death of his young parents affect Teddy. They shouldn't have died, it should have been somebody else. Yet, Teddy has been forced to grow up without them, envious of those with loving parents. Victoire can't help but wonder why Teddy is unable accept the amount of love he has around him. Maybe, with a little persuasion and some good advice from a caring godfather, Teddy can finally get over the death of the parents that he never had the chance to know.

Character Death warning for previous deaths. They don't actually occur in the story.

Submitted by Mistletoe of Slytherin for the Winter Tales Challenge.

Reviewer: star_sailor Signed
Date: 12/13/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Cost Of Glory

This was a very good read! Remus comes out in Teddy with the way he talks. They both seem really thought out whenever they're speaking. The flashback worked perfectly too. And the composition and description is amazing; very eloquent.

This goes without mentioning the fact that Teddy and Victoire are totally cute together (if you abbreviate both of their names, you can call them TV! How cool!) You also get several cool points for squeezing "lackadaisical" in there.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I was also worried that Teddy would be a bit too angsty and not enough like Remus, but I\'m really glad that you think otherwise! -Kat