06/07/05
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I am in college, American, and in love with God. I enjoy reading, writing, music (playing, singing, listening), my friends and family.
I am a compulsive editor. This means that while new chapters may come infrequently (translation: I write slowly), the older chapters are always under revision. Check back now and again to read the new and improved versions! Also, I've been working on Britishisms, but as an American, my knowledge is limited. Please, feel free to (gently) Britpick.
I also write a lot of drabbles, which you can find by following that link to my website, along with some poetry and original fiction.
Lovely banner thanks to GinnyPotter!
This banner is thanks to the wonderful TheVanishingAct!
At The Ceili: This is a Christmas gift for Cinderella Angelina, a beloved fellow SPEW member. The title comes from the song it is based on, performed by the very excellent group Celtic Woman. Enjoy, Leslie!
Gold: This was originally the third chapter of In His Own Right, but I felt that it really didn’t fit with the others, so now it is a sequel.
Hide and Seek: This slightly lengthy one-shot deals with the choice between good and evil. It’s under Romance only because it didn’t fit in any of the General categories.
Home To Stay: Based on and set around a song by Josh Groban (same title), Hermione goes travelling Europe, trying to find what she’s lost during the War. Ron waits for her, living for the short notes that she sends to Ginny, waiting for the day when Hermione will be ready to come home for good.
In His Own Right: It was after writing my SPEW 007 challenge (seven prompts, one character) that I really came to appreciate Neville. He’s been through a lot, but he is strong and capable—he just needs a chance to show it. (It has a sequel in Gold.)
Left, Right, and Centre: This began as an attempt to understand why the relationship between Bill Weasley and Fleur Delacour seems to work, though no one else understands why. The reason? Fleur isn’t the idiot everyone thinks she is.
Love Is Not a Simple Thing: For now, this is a one-shot (its continuation is unlikely, and depends on the revival of a long-dormant plot bunny). It is a Remus/Hermione romance, but features no time travel. Instead, the setup comes during Hermione’s school years. Following chapters (if they appear) will follow their growing relationship during the war and post-war years.
So She Dances: One of my personal favourites. It's based on the Josh Groban song of the same name, and is a Neville/Ginny missing moment from GoF. It was the first atmosphere-based piece I wrote, and it came out quite nicely.
The Unknown: Also Neville-based, I consider this the best thing I have yet written. It's a little darker, but very real, with hope at its end.
Transformations: This is a Remus/Tonks, my first—and most ambitious—project. It began back in August 2005 and has been heavily rewritten and edited in preparation for the long-awaited finish. It will be around 11 or 12 chapters when finished
Waiting: This is a post-HBP one-shot, now AU. It was written for the S.P.E.W. Anniversary Challenge: Friends discussing changes since the one-year anniversary of an event (in this case, the death of Dumbledore).
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Date: 10/14/05 Title: None
I do kind of wish there was a rest of it, but I really like what you've done. Must now go read your other story!
Author's Response: *sigh* I kind of wish there was a rest of it too, but alas. Thanks verrah much for the review, and also going read my other stuff! ^_^
First by Hallie Black
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: James Potter is an obnoxious, arrogant prat. Lily Evans is stubborn and a bit arrogant herself. James loves Lily. Lily hates James. Will James ever conquer the love of his life when his each and every attempt always fails spectacularly? Humor is guaranteed thanks to the one and only, Sirius Black!
Date: 06/15/05 Title: Chapter 2: Getting to Platform 9 and 3/4
Not bad. Pretty good with the Mauraders, though Lily seems a bit...not quite right. She's harsh, yes, but not so harsh.
Author's Response: Thank you! I didn’t realize Lily sounded so harsh! Anyway, refer to what I said to mookiemoooo: I promise I’ll try to make her more appealing!!
First Name Basis by Vanityfair
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Miss Granger and Prof. Snape make the awkward transition to Hermione and Severus...or is that 'Mione and Sevie? Throw in a game of MASH and you have a humorous look at the nature of first names.
Date: 06/28/05 Title: None
I really like the little bits of humor you stick in there -- those lines that everyone else has pointed out already so I won't. Pretty good. Keep writing!
Author's Response: I will! Thanks! Chapter 3 Submitted by the way!! :)!!
Harry Potter & the Year of the Dragon by CraftySlytherin
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: They say that true love conquers all. Harry and Ginny, and Ron and Hermione will be able to put this to the test during the new term to come. With a deranged killer on the loose, new friends, a new Defense Against the Dark Arts teacher, and Voldemort planning his final attack, it will be a year of trials and tribulations. And what exactly is the Year of the Dragon? You'll just have to read to find out!
CHAPTER 14 IS UP! CHAPTER 15 IS IN QUEUE!
Date: 06/27/05 Title: Chapter 4: Happy Birthday, Harry
First review! This is what I get for staying up late. Anyway, you're doing well with the characters we know best. You're not quite so sure with Draco and Lucius and Narcissa, but then, we don't know that much about them so you don't have so much to go off of. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks! It's always good to hear that reviewers think I'm doing good with the characters we know so well :) As far as the Malfoys go, about all we know about Lucius is that he's a DeathEater and he's cruel and evil. Draco is also cruel, but also a bit chicken. We really know nothing about Narcissa other than the fact that she's Draco's mum. So, I'm taking a little creative license with the Malfoys, but so far everyone seems to be responding to it okay, which is great!. I'll be trying to submit chapter 5 tomorrow!
Date: 07/04/05 Title: Chapter 5: The Letter
Very good. Draco's turning nicely, a little quickly maybe, but nicely.
I like Fred and George, but I think they detract from the main story a bit. They sort of steal the show whenever they're around. Good with Harry; Ginny's a bit touchier than I'd have guessed. I think it makes sense for her (like Ron) to be sensitive about Harry's money, but I don't think she needs to be angry about things like the Firebolt. Not that angry, anyway, although I see where it's coming from. More please!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like what I'm doing with Draco. I'm sorry you think it's coming to fast. As for Fred and George, they are my favorites, and so many reviewers have requested more of them that I had to oblige. Plus I like to add a bit of humor to most of my chapters. I personally don't think I made Ginny too angry. After all, it didn't take much for Harry to talk her into taking the Firebolt. I think she was just more...taken aback. Chapter 6 is in queue!
Date: 08/28/05 Title: Chapter 9: Love Bites
Eeep! Keep writing, Luna's got to be okay!
Date: 06/24/05 Title: Chapter 3: The Killer at Large
Sweet! I like this lots, can't wait for the rest!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It will probably be Sunday or Monday before I update this story again. I'm doing this one at the same time as my other fic, Yessir, That's My Baby, and it's that story's turn for a next chapter. That is if the last one I submitted ever gets out of queue *grrrrrrr*. My mod on this story is way faster (Go Chelsea!!!!). Hope you enjoy the rest of this story as it gets put up!
Date: 07/25/05 Title: Chapter 6: Hogwarts, Sweet Hogwarts
Very nice! That's a MEAN cliffhanger, but I'm gonna say...Bill! ...or...Lupin! Or...hm. Ran out of guesses. Update and tell us soon please!
Author's Response: The new chapter is up, so you don't have to wait any longer!
Date: 06/24/05 Title: None
I like the start of this; waiting for the rest!
Author's Response: the second chapter has been submitted. hopefully it will be up soon.
Truth Be Told by CraftySlytherin
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: What happens when Fred and George Weasley, Hogwarts' reknowned kings of pranks, decide to spike a shipment of pumpkin juice bound for Hogwarts with truth potion? A day filled with true confessions of Hogwarts students!!!!!
Imperfect by annie
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: After the hospital scene in which Tonks finally admitted her feelings, her and Remus have a discussion by the lake. A short, rather angsty-but-fluffy Tonks/Remus one-shot. Contains HBP spoilers.
Date: 07/25/05 Title: Chapter 1: Imperfect
Awww, that's sweet. I really like it. You have an excellent style, very true to character. Keep writing!
Meet Me There by Miss
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: What happens in a year full of meetings on top of the Astronomy Tower? Find out. A simple One Shot
Date: 07/29/05 Title: Chapter 1: Meet Me There
That's sweet. A little implausible maybe -- I mean just being on top of the Astronomy Tower, not the HBP stuff -- but sweet and well done. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks. Well that is what fantasy is for and, personally, I would love to be able to experience the elemants like that.
Strong by Croyez
Rated: •Summary: She relaxed under his grip, and he let go of her, taking a step backwards. She looked up at him, into his cold gray eyes, and saw something there. Behind all the coldness, the malice, there was more. A softness uncharacteristic of him, hidden behind it all. The sight of it made her knees weak, and she desperately wanted to fall into his arms again, to fall into what was such a tormenting mystery to her...And that’s when she just couldn’t take it anymore. One-Shot
Date: 05/20/06 Title: Chapter 1: Strong
Wow. I am impressed. There’s a couple of grammar errors that I caught, but a lot more that was brilliant.
She sighed, hands tucked inside her robe pockets, and began to think about him, like did almost all the time now.
I think you left out a “she”, between like and did.
“I’m a prefect, Parkinson. It is my job to check that things stay in order. And I would advice you to cut back on the threats.”
In this context, you want “advise.”
He stopped walking, and she felt his gaze still on her. She wanted to wrap her arms around him, to shake some sense into him. She wanted to yell, to scream, to cry, to let him know just how much he was hurting her for doing ‘what was safest’. She wanted to hurt him back, to make him feel the way she did, but she couldn’t summon the strength. She was weak, beaten. Everything was gone, now.
This is just one excerpt that I thought is really, really good. The way you work the mood in is terrific. Ginny, though not like we’ve seen her, is believable, and so is Draco. Fantastic job – I’m going to read the rest of your stuff now!
Date: 09/10/05 Title: None
Very cute. They're pretty in-character and the whole feeling's very fluffy-cute. Keep writing!
Harry Potter and the Fight for Ginny by Sorn
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Will Ginny's love be the salvation or death of Harry?
To my fans I would like to say that I am back to writing, and I have now updated many of the chapters! Some changes are just grammer edits, but there are many adds and changes to chapters. Some based on your reviews or small things I felt needed to be added. Please take a look at the changes and let me know what you think. I am looking forward to hearing what you have to say about the changes and up comeing chapters.
Date: 08/15/05 Title: Chapter 1: Ginny's Fight
Oooh. Very nice start, suspense and romance and so forth. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thank you, I will. At this point if I stopped my ego would take a hit! Thanks for reviewing.
Only in Dreams by Ashwinder
Rated: •Summary: In the summer after HBP, Ginny tries to find a way to deal with her separation from Harry. Contains spoilers.
Date: 01/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot
I'm sorry this won't be a long review, but there's nothing in your story to pick on! And I'm a bit of a grammar/spelling/flow Nazi, so that's a big deal.
I really liked your idea of Ginny's perfect daydream -- and Hermione's. Very sweet.
Catching Fireflies by Nyruserra
Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Summary: She supposed that she had never really thought about it much before that day – the day she saw him again, standing in the rain outside her door dripping and gorgeous, like a vision out of a hazy past.
One-shot, OW/HG, Not (necessarily) HBP compliant
Date: 03/16/07 Title: Chapter 1: Catching Fireflies
I love the beginning! It's so romantically perfect and cliched and...not real. Ha.
“So, where’re you’re two watch dogs today, lass?”
That should be "your" watch dogs, and
Oliver had come down, all rumpled looking in his stripped pyjamas
that should be "striped".
I like the way you skim through their history together. It gives us a chance to see them grow up a little, and who they are around each other.
If Ron’s too blind to be able to appreciate what a great girl you are, just bid your time.
I think that should be "bide".
In the mean time, I hope I can still count on you to be clipping my articles, ‘cause I'll always know how to appreciate a good thing when I find it.
Woo! That's an adorably sly little line there. It's suggestive in a...non-suggestive...way.
So, she enjoyed living her romances out vicariously through her reading habits, when no one could catch her at it, enthusiastically helping to marry Ron off when he finally proposed, to Pansy Parkinson of all people (whom she now considered a dear friend, despite their history), and helping Harry move in with Seamus when they felt they were ready.
This is fun, but it's very long and feels a little awkward. It might work better as two or three sentences.
*nod* I like how Hermione eventually accepts that she and Ron are not meant for each other. You work in so many non-canon things so subtly that they work, though I've really no idea how (Pansy, Percy, Harry/Seamus [!]). But I was really thinking of how Hermione becomes a Medi-Witch, and leaves the Auror dream for the boys. She's competent enough at times, but doesn't have the right mentality to be an Auror.
(She had abandoned her slight crush years before, when Percy had shown himself to have similar taste in dates as she did.)
O.o *snort*
The war was technically over, after Harry had defeated Voldemort, but the raids were still continuing ayear later
You're missing a space in "a year".
No, none of the things that would have been present in her favourite romance novel were actually there, and as Hermione saw Oliver’s warm brown eyes light up as he smiled at her, she found she didn’t need them to recognize this moment for what it was.
Awwww! What a wonderful ending! I was expecting more of a present-time story, but the way it's all told through the past works quite well. After all, love has to start somewhere. Wonderful job!
Author's Response: Yes, this one is more error-ridden then most of my work, isn\'t it? *hides head* It was actually one of the first fanfictions I ever wrote, and though I keep telling myself it deserves to be edited properly, I never seem to find the time to do it - probably because I\'m afraid I may try and re-write it *lol*
This story has a very special place in my heart, and despite the errors, remainds one of my favourite things I\'ve written, so I always get extra excited when people read it and enjoy it so much *hugs*
Thank you so much for the amazing review, and I appreciate all of your advise and con-crit here - and you may have just given me the incentive to go back and fix it up :-)
Missing Scenes by MoonysMistress
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: In every story, there are missing scenes: smaller stories that don't make it into the main plot, but that subconsciously happen all the same. Harry Potter is no different — behind the scenes were the makings of a love that surprised us all.
Date: 10/14/05 Title: Chapter 3: A Farewell of Sorts
Oh it's so good! Molly's unusually stern, but I suppose that isn't too surprising, as she watches Remus and Tonks brood over each other. Arthur's good, too; I love his awkward "More wine!"
Author's Response: *happy grin* I did decide to infuse a little more sternness into Molly. We know she's certainly capable of it, though, watching how she treats the twins and Ron at times. Plus, yeah, she's quite annoyed with how thick the lovers are. Ha, poor Arthur. Thanks so much!
Date: 09/01/05 Title: Chapter 1: Remembering Sirius
Very very good. I'm working on something similar, but it's taking me ages to figure out the time scheme...anyway, yours is really good. I like believable stories.
Author's Response: I didn't really do much of a time scheme, if that helps...I sort of just looked through the book to find out where and why they mentioned Tonks, and what they said about her. If that helps at all. I'm glad you like! ^_^ Thanks for the review, and good luck with your story, I'll be sure to read it.