Your style is very interesting, but you might want to tone it down a bit. It's quite grandiose, which can be good, particularly in a prologue, which needs to sound a bit mysterious to draw readers in. More on that later.

Some of your sentences are really long and the syntax becomes quite twisted, for example, "Earth is the microcosm of the macrocosm for good and evil both have been done and always have the two been entwined in the other’s machinations."

In trying to sound very serious, it ends up sounding rather absurd.

On a smaller note, you've set up two opposing forces - good/evil, right/wrong, etc. The whole point of yin and yang is that the forces are NOT opposing, they work together. There is a spot of white within the black, and a spot of black within the white. They are not diametrically opposed, they exist in the same cycle. To conflate yin and yang with good and evil is a gross simplification of Daoist philosophy.

Additionally, within the prophecy you write that "a triumvirate will be the antithesis to the dark being" but then you list FIVE people. A triumvirate consists of three people - not five. You imply that two of of the five will die before facing the evil (I think) but it's so unclear that I can't even tell.

Also, prophecies in Harry Potter don't seem to be quite this... fuzzy, for lack of a better word. The major fuzziness in Trelawney's prophecy about Harry is who it refers to - Neville or Harry, since they are both born to parents who defied the Dark Lord three times at the end of July. But the next part - the Dark Lord will mark him - makes it quite clear that Harry is the other part of the prophecy.

The end of the prologue is also quite uninspiring. The last sentence could have been cut out completely, and the ellipsis was utterly unnecessary.

Lastly, we have absolutely no idea who this council is, just that apparently five of them decide to do these things.

In short, I am utterly uninspired to read the rest of this story despite my initial intrigue.

I really enjoyed this poem. I like the atmosphere this poem sets up and how it expounds on its theme. In particular, some of the imagery is just beautiful, especially the lines “fiery ribbon” and “sickle of light”.

I am intrigued by the line, “No memory left”. Are the people even capable of remembering the unicorn? I’m not sure; I’ll chew on it awhile longer.

I’m not sure I’m crazy about using “dawns” or “sounds” as verbs, though I think they’re both perfectly grammatically correct. I think the second to last line might make more sense as, “It’s ignorance that hinders us from seeing” instead of “to see”. Chalk it up to a style thing.

The verse about ears was a bit confusing. I couldn’t tell at first if the ears were the unicorn’s ears or the people’s ears. I’m going to go with the unicorn’s ears because that makes more sense.

Author's Response: Thank you, Aida. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yes, the unicorn's ears are meant. I pictured the unicorn to stand in the bushes and look around while listening for possible danger - which then comes with the people. Anyway, thanks for the review. :)

This has no reviews and that made me sad, since this is a very interesting story.

It's an interesting idea that Snape and Regulus Black were somehow engaged in a physical relationship while they were Death Eaters. I'm not sure what to make of it. I feel like Snape was so Lily-sexual that he just couldn't have sex, even if it was just sex, with anyone else. Still, it fits the story and it was handled tastefully.

The jumps were interesting between hunting for the Muggle girl (or was she Muggleborn?) and Severus and Regulus at Snape's flat. They felt a bit odd the first time I read through. I wonder if it would make more sense if it was completely chronological.

This was a very enjoyable read. The details of the story were really good like where they hide their poisons and Lucius and Bellatrix avoiding the walls.

The story seems to be told primarily from Snape's perspective and it does seem a bit weird that Bellatrix is called Bella. It feels somewhat more fanon than canon.

Author's Response:

Thank you for the review! To be honest, I wasn't sure this story would get any, as I have taken quite a big step away from established canon!  I have been quietly shipping Severus/Regulus since OotP, so I wanted to explore that possiblity, and this was the story that emerged. 

I know personally that I tend to overuse time jumps in a lot of my writing and in retrospect, I could have done more to make this story clearer/stronger/more sense-making, so I will definitely take that ito account in future fics. I suppose Bella is more fanon than canon, hmm. I may need to rethink that.  Thank you for your review, it was really helpful and I am glad that you found the story interesting. :)

I really enjoyed this story. I was surprised by the mixture of religion and magic, even more so that JK Rowling said that the wizarding world is as religious as the Muggle one (going off your review reply). Then again, modern Europe is hardly religious.

I enjoyed the characterization of Hugh, particularly the idea that he becomes the Fat Friar.

I was a bit baffled about why the Muggle suddenly decides they have to attack the wizard monks. It seems a bit strange considering it was neither stated that they kept their magical status a secret nor that he had problems with them being wizards before.

All in all, really good interesting story.

Author's Response: Aida - I'm glad you liked the story. =) As for the Muggles...I see this as happening around the time when the whole witch hysteria thing was going on...I really should have written this better, to show the motive, but this was kind of a thrown-together oneshot. >.> The idea was: The Muggle didn't really mind when they were helping him, but once he'd gotten home safe and told other people about what happened, then that's when things started to go sour. Sorry that was so unclear. >.> I am glad you found it interesting though.

In short - I love it.

To expand, particularly since you and this one-shot deserve it:

Your Draco voice is spot on. He argues with himself and agrees with both sides. He is arrogant, he is weak, he hates everyone.

Myrtle's appearance is also great. I like that everyone else just leaves when they hear her instead of telling her to get out. Typical Draco to be the only one to think of that.

I also like the surprise from the summary. I was expecting something more AU, with more out of character Draco. Instead the conflict with Harry happens exactly like it did, and exactly like it should.

Neil!

I love so much about this fic.

I love the plot of it - Ginny being forced to go to Tibet since it's part of her contract, Harry deciding not to go since he has office reorganization, Ginny deciding to take Luna, Luna and the older Scamander rescuing Ginny, and Rolf's cameo at the end. It was all very well written, and well characterized. I especially loved Ginny's thought process about how no one (but Harry) must ever be allowed to know that she fell off her broom. Utterly brilliant, utterly Ginny.

I loved the title - ECCENTRIC, indeed.

I particularly loved Rolf's cameo and how he is a Harpies fan and a cryptozoologist.

All in all, absolutely great read.

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

This story (and “It Takes Two”) are the result of my thinking about the names of Harry and Ginny’s children. The original intention of this was simply to explain why the kids are “five dead heroes and Luna”. Then, when Luna arrived, still single and without a boyfriend although Ginny is married and pregnant, well, I had to sneak Rolf in, didn’t I? ;-)

-N-