Welcome to my Author's Page!
Salutations! Well, a little about myself. My name is Jordan, and I love to write fanfction, as well as my own fiction. Usually, I just compose short creative writing pieces, but this is my branch off into complete fiction.
I also feed off of constructive critisism. I think it influences the way I write something tremendously, and it inspires me so. If you are reading my story, please feel free to give me a few pointers! It is nice to just get the review of "Yeah, your story is great, update soon", and don't get me wrong. I greatly aprecciate them, but I feel that tips here and there are much more helpful.
Happy Readings!
Thank you to Forgotten Poems, QueenHal, Kitkat2010, and Fantasium!
Haha, this story made me laugh. I loved how you characterized the pair of Marauders. I couldn't find any grammatical errors with your story, which is not something I can put often about people! Great job. I loved Sirius always trying to change tactics and it never working. You are a fantastic writer.
Wow. This is incredible. Quite a tear-jerker at the end, if you ask me. I don't read many Ernie/Hannah fics, and this one was sweet in its own special way. And yet dreadfully terrible. You had a fantastic mix of the two, making this story unbelievably emotional.
It was so painful to read the last few parts, knowing that Hannah was fighting to the death, just for Ernie, even though she didn't have to die. It was sad that she couldn't mutter out the last bit of her "I love you" to Ernie. But it created a very powerful message, and I think it was perfect for the story.
The only thing I found questionable is whenever the two Death Eaters put the "Silencio" spell on Ernie, he starts talking a while later because the spell was wearing off. I didn't think that it could wear off, and only would cease to work when the countercurse was muttered, but maybe I'm just imagining things. =]
Great story; I enjoyed this one to no end. Keep up the superb work!
This is amazing! Almost as amazing as your Beta! Haha, just kidding. I'm so glad this got accepted. It's a wonderderful story! Keep writing!
Author's Response: thanks for your review and also for your great beta job on this chapter!
NOW COMPLETE!
Ooooh, this is good so far! I started reading, and I thought it might have been Snape with Harry, but I couldn't tell. And then voila! He comes out in the open. Hmmm, I wonder what he was doing there.
Gah! Severus Snape's personal life. I'm so disgusted and intruiged at the same time. I want to know more! continue, please!!!
I love it! It's fluffy stuff, but sometimes, that's all that I want to read. Nice fic, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Yay! Thank you so much! I know how much people like myself love fluffy fics. Believe me. I like them a lot... ;)
Niamara
Haha, this story had a funny twist to it. I enjoyed this a lot. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Wow. This amazingly funny. I love the idea of this, and I can't wait to read more. Please keep up the good work.
Wow. This amazingly funny. I love the idea of this, and I can't wait to read more. Please keep up the good work.
Awww, that's so sweet! I love it! Please update soon. *waits in anticipation* weeeee! harry is on the way!!!!!!
Author's Response: *Waits in anticipation,* gee, I\'ll try to update soon if you\'re that excited! (only joking!) Yes, my feelings too: weee!!!!! I\'m glad you\'re liking the story, I\'m loving writing it! Thanks for the review!!
My, my! Remus and Tonks certainly have a very colorful vocabulary! I can't exactly picture them saying that, but after getting the image of Sirius with a Muggle CD player, I suppose I can imagine anything! Good job, and I hope you enjoy writing the rest of your story as much as I enjoyed reading it.
My, my! Remus and Tonks certainly have a very colorful vocabulary! I can't exactly picture them saying that, but after getting the image of Sirius with a Muggle CD player, I suppose I can imagine anything! Good job, and I hope you enjoy writing the rest of your story as much as I enjoyed reading it.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I have enjoyed working with this fic, and it\'s good that you have enjoyed it. You know, my friends say that I can not write a single thing without every character having a potty mouth. I guess it\'s like a curse for me. ----- RMV
This story is very nice; you seem to have captured the characters true to Rowling's books. I only caught two things that I figured I would bring to your attention. In the first paragraph, you say that Lily brought Miles home to meet her "parent", though it should be parents. It's something minor that doesn't really detract from the story, but I wanted to let you know. The other thing I noticed was when Lily and Petunia are bickering at the table while Miles is over. I would think that Mr. and Mrs. Evans would be a bit more keen on letting their daughters know to stop arguing while there is a guest over, but I suppose that each person would expect them to behave in a certain way. But, overall, I enjoy the story thus far. Your OC's are very believable, and are not exaggerated to an unlikely level. Good job, and good luck with your later chapters.
Author's Response: Hey thanks for the review! I really appreciate the constructive criticism. I agree with you on Lily\'s parent not reacting enough. I should have put something in there about how there fighting was a usual occurence in the household, but i was so excited about getting my first chapter out. : P
This story is very nice; you seem to have captured the characters true to Rowling's books. I only caught two things that I figured I would bring to your attention. In the first paragraph, you say that Lily brought Miles home to meet her "parent", though it should be parents. It's something minor that doesn't really detract from the story, but I wanted to let you know. The other thing I noticed was when Lily and Petunia are bickering at the table while Miles is over. I would think that Mr. and Mrs. Evans would be a bit more keen on letting their daughters know to stop arguing while there is a guest over, but I suppose that each person would expect them to behave in a certain way. But, overall, I enjoy the story thus far. Your OC's are very believable, and are not exaggerated to an unlikely level. Good job, and good luck with your later chapters.
*giggles fiercly* I was laughing the entire way through this. You cliched it very well. Kudos for you!
Author's Response: I\'m glad I provided a laugh for you. Thank you very much!
*giggles* Goodness! This certainly is Cliche Nation! Haha, it was funny. I loved it!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Wow, this is incredible. Quite sad as well. I almost wish that it wasn't a one-shot, just so there would be more. Fantastic job. The last line is a great "clencher" ending (as my 7th grade english teacher would say). Brilliant!
Awwww, this is so sweet! The utterly hopeless romantic within me is crying her eyes out, while even my inner realist is getting a little sniffly. I figured there would be something at the end with "For what it's worth..." something something something, but I didn't think it would be so sweet!
You did a fantastic job, and I hope you write many, many, many more stories. Happy Holidays to you, too! (And if you don't celebrate anything in December, happy snowy days! Or, if you live in the southern hemisphere, happy sunny days! Or, if it's hot where you live all year round...well...I'll just stop.)
For what it's worth, you're a great writer. =]
This is...wow. I love it. You characterized both Harry and Ginny perfectly. I'm glad you didn't make him a suddenly perfect dancer. *giggles at GoF* And I loved Ginny's confidence with Harry, but at the same time, I could see her fear that he would get hurt. (Well, seeing as how she said she was afraid of him getting killed, it's obvious how I saw it *duh*, but I liked how you wrote it.)
The end is sad, but yet, had a good final note about it that I can't put my finger on. Most endings just...well, end, but it's usually too sudden and very short and choppy. Your ending did creep up on me rather fast, but I liked it nonetheless.
The only thing I would want you to differently would be to not end this! It's very good!
Author's Response: *Hugs teh Lemons* Thank you, m\'dear. Your kind words made my day!
I think that this was very creative. It was sweet and I liked how Lily and James were doing almost the same thing as Harry and Ginny. Your ending was very good, and I liked how it summed things up in its own way.