07/14/05
Welcome to my Author's Page!
Salutations! Well, a little about myself. My name is Jordan, and I love to write fanfction, as well as my own fiction. Usually, I just compose short creative writing pieces, but this is my branch off into complete fiction.
I also feed off of constructive critisism. I think it influences the way I write something tremendously, and it inspires me so. If you are reading my story, please feel free to give me a few pointers! It is nice to just get the review of "Yeah, your story is great, update soon", and don't get me wrong. I greatly aprecciate them, but I feel that tips here and there are much more helpful.
Happy Readings!
Thank you to Forgotten Poems, QueenHal, Kitkat2010, and Fantasium!
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Prying Eyes by nysuperstarz
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Ginny is dead. This is a poem in Harry's point of veiw expressing his feelings about Ginny's death.
Date: 12/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prying Eye's
Hmm, I could've sworn I reviewed this a long time ago. Well, I'm quite sorry I didn't.
This is beautiful. It's very Harry, if he was the poetic kind. =]
I can understand what he feels [[even if I can't relate]]. All his life, he's been asked questions about long lost loved ones, and I think your poem expresses his anger and frustration perfectly.
Great job, Roop!
Author's Response: It\'s all right! Thank-you for the review!
From Potter to...James? by MissSammiekins
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: When kids are young, they learn that every story has to have the Five W's: who, what, when, where, and why. This story is no different.
Who: James Potter and Lily Evans
What: Fall in love
When: Their seven years at Hogwarts
Where: Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry
Why: Ahh, now this is the mystery.
How did James make Lily hate him for so long? How did he mature? What made Lily finally fall in love with him?
Learn this and more as you follow James and Lily through their years at Hogwarts, in From Potter to...James?
Date: 01/13/07 Title: Chapter 1: Sock Puppets and Crushes
I liked it. It was humorous, original, and and enjoyable read.
I've never read a fic where James starts out liking a girl other than Lily. I mean, it's mentioned that he's dated other girls besides her during their Hogwarts years, but I've never read something like this before. I really like it. =]
The only thing I found questionable was James' behavoir near the end. I cannot picture him saying that to his father. Growing up in a wizarding family, James would know not to use magic of his own. But, perhaps it will mean something later on in the story...?
I'm excited in any event! Great job!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! Ireally wanted to do something different, so I\'m so glad you liked it!
About James\' behavior near the end...Really, since when has James listened to any rules? ;) But really, you\'re 100% correct, and I\'ll try to fix that. But the fight with his dad will become somewhat important later.
Thanks so much for the reveiw and the constructive criticism!
~Sammie
Uncle Fred Calls Him Dick by MagEd
Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: 2008 QSQ Awards Runner-up for Best Post-Hogwarts
Harry defeated Voldemort. Harry married Ginny. Harry and Ginny had five children. Harry disappeared. My name is Lily Potter, and this is the story of what happened when my father returned after six years missing to find my mother about to re-marry. This is the story of myself, my crazy family, and most of all, this is the story of my parents and the man who tried to come between them. (pre-Deathly Hallows)
*Completed*
"Oh, I can so die happy now!" -Sirius Potter
Date: 12/28/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Uncle Ron Never Laughs
I like it so far! It's a little confusing with all of the kids names being the names of their grandparents, but I think I have it. lol.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: There\'s a chart (for lack of a better term) of the children and who belongs to who on my profile if you want to check it and get them all straight. I\'m glad you like it, thanks for the review.
Date: 12/30/06 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Uncle Charlie Realizes Everything
Ooooh! *chants* UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE!
Wow, this story is incredible. The characters stay in, well, perfect character, and the plot is flowing smothly. I love the tension in this story, and gahhh! Why must you end at such a cliffie!
*glares at you*
*feels bad*
*hugs you*
*urges you to finish writing*
This story is absolutely amazing. I LOVE it!
*adds to faves*
You're doing a fantastic job, and just, wow. I love this. ^.^
Author's Response: Thank you for such a wonderful view, glaring aside :) I\'m glad you like it!
Date: 01/11/07 Title: None
Wow. I like the beginning. It leads up to a very promising story. I'm very interested into knowing who the main character, though I'm thinking it's going to be the little girl. But I'm not very good at guessing... lol.
And I'm very sorry this review isn't any longer, but I'm being shoved away from the computer from my dear mother, who is telling me that I have a date with my dirty room. *glares at messy clutter*
Thank you again for the banner!!
Who Believes In Love? by Oppungo
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: There she sat, out in the pouring rain, the droplets falling fast over her face and hair, her head held high with unquenchable pride. There she sat, one of the most beautiful young women in the world, inviting the rain to wash her away. Fleur Delacour knew for a fact that she would never have been sitting there like that two years ago. Before she met Bill Weasley.
The story of Bill Weasley and Fleur Delacour's relationship, written for Jenna in Secret SPEW 2.
Date: 04/19/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Hey! As I'm sure you know, we're reading your fic in the SBBC!!
And, to let you know, you did a fantastic job. I found your characterization to be brilliant, especially Fleur. I've never liked her as a character. She was always haughty, stuck-up, and in my opinion, rather obnoxious. In your story, you explain some of that. (Her grandmother saying beauty was a gift and a curse, how Fleur's mother had made it so that she argued and protested until she got what she wanted, etc.) I liked how you described Bill. He, like JKR had described him, did appear very cool. I don't really know how else to describe him. Madame Delacour was quite a character with a very stubborn personality, and yet, I couldn't help but adore her. Although many of feel she was wrong in what she did, she really did have Fleur's best interests at heart. Her daughter must have had countless men fall for and maybe even propose to her, and I'm sure Madame Delacour was just trying to protect her daughter. I liked the contrast you put in her. And Gabrielle was a nice touch as well. Her innocent nature did not match her concern for Fleur and Bill, which made the story more interesting.
Another thing I'd like to comment on is the wonderful French accent you were able to skillfully work into the dialogue. It made the story much more believable, and you did it without making it too much or too little.
The only thing I didn't care for was that kiss... Well, I could see it happening if more time had passed since Bill had left Fleur's (like, weeks), and then more time had passed before the kiss and his proposal. But, I understand you didn't want to carry on this one-shot into a billion-page length book. =]
Overall, you did a fantastic job, and I really liked what you did with this pairing.
Keep up the great work! =D
Another Dance by KASK
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Life is wonderful, or so they say. Harry Potter never really did get a chance to experience this. He never had fond childhood memories or a loving family. But as his life grows darker with what is to come, he shares a final dance. That's when he realizes there may be something left to live for: another dance with Ginny Weasley.
Date: 05/31/07 Title: Chapter 1: Another Dance
Keri, you never cease to amaze me.
I love your stories! They're so...amazing. :D Please keep writing my favorite ships! :P
You're fantastic!
Author's Response: *Grins* Thanks Jordan! <3
Light Up My Life by KASK
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Norah Kelley was the one James had always seen himself with. They had been together forever and he loved her. Lily Evans, on the other hand, was the one girl he truly loathed.
But in fifth year, with a changing outlook on life and problems finally surfacing at home, James and Lily began to a friendship. Both known for hating each other, they agreed to keep their friendship quiet.
But as things progress, James comes to find that he can't have everything and a decision has to be made. With this decision, James learns that what you expect isn't always what happens and love can spout from unexpected places.
This is told from James' POV.
Date: 04/19/07 Title: Chapter 1: Witchy Woman
I love your story so far, Keri! You've done a great job with it being from James' POV. You've portrayed him well as the arrogant, thinks he's better than everybody else, can't stand when people think they're better than everybody else immature fifteen year old.
Great job! *clicks next towards chappie the second*
PS-Witchy Woman=great choice. =P
Author's Response: Thanks Jordan!
Date: 04/19/07 Title: Chapter 2: Never Surrender
Y'know, I had never, ever thought that James had asked Lily out in their fifth year on a dare/prank/out of pride. I love the creativity you've brought to the story.
And it's very funny, which I also enjoy. =D
Author's Response: Thank you, dear.
Date: 04/19/07 Title: Chapter 3: How Bizarre
Oh...well, I guess it wasn't the eventful canon scene we seein OotP...
But, I really like how you've set the story up. It's so original, it's crazy. I'm totally going to add this to my favorite's list. :D
Author's Response: *Hugs* *Loves reviews* Thank you!
Date: 05/18/07 Title: Chapter 5: Change Your Mind
'Tis such a short chapter!
..Well, not really, but short for my novel-length expectations of you!!!!!! Hehe
Please keep writing this story! I'll help you ever step of the way if I have to, but YOU NEED TO KEEP WRITING!!
You're amazing!
*twirls*
*waits impatiently for your next chappie*
*beams encouragingly at you*
Author's Response: :] :] Thanks Jordan! You\'re quite amazing too!
Dried Petals by Sentinelity
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary:
It withers in the musky atmosphere.
Delicate as they fall,
The final minutes of life they hold so dear.
Yet,
Why do those red eyes laugh?
Date: 04/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: Dried Petals
I love this, Kelly! I like the mixing of red and green, and the bit about the two "vivid green streatms out at night, shaped into to and linked as one." This part reminded me of the Dark Mark.
Your imagery is incredible. This reminded me very much of the Quidditch World Cup with all of the mayhem described. Great job!
I Will Come Back by megan_lupin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: “The outside world did not understand their relationship, she knew. Other people had never understood, and they probably never would understand, the way that the love was shown between the two purebloods. It was there – it was present in the two of them very strongly, and it always had been.”
Narcissa Black and Lucius Malfoy have a relationship that is understood by few, yet the love that exists between them is just as strong as it was when they met. Now, it has been over a year since they have been together, and each of their minds wanders back to better times – times when they had each other.
Date: 04/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: I Will Come Back
I liked this! You're right; many people portray the Malfoy's marriage as unpleasant, abusive, and unloving, but this was nice to read to mix it up a little. Personally, I've always thought they loved each other very much, and I'm glad somebody else agrees with me. =]
You were very creative with this. Many Malfoy Moments are Missing Moments from the books, and I think you wrote them in excellent character. I liked how both were confident while looking at each other during their school years, and I especially loved his wink. That seemed so Lucius Malfoy-ish to me.
The transitions between past, present, Lucius, and Narcissa were also well-written. They flowed smoothly, and I didn't have to go back and reread to see where I was in time, and whose POV I was reading from.
So, overall, you did a fantastic job. Keep up the great work!!
Author's Response: Well, thank you so much for the wonderful review, greeneyes. I\'m glad you liked my portrayal of the Malfoys, as I, too, became a bit tired with every fan fic I read with them showing their relationship in a negative way.
I\'m also glad you felt they were both in character throughout the whole thing. Sometimes that\'s the hardest bit, especially when writing characters that one doesn\'t see very often.
Again, though, I\'m glad you liked it, and thank you for such a great review.
~Megan
The Worth of an Uncanny Love by BloodRayne
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Cho Chang is in an abusive relationship with a person she loves more than herself.
2nd Place in the Spring Challenges, *To Laugh or Cry* prompt, by BloodRayne of Gryffindor.
Date: 04/27/07 Title: Chapter 1: Really Worth it?
I hope this is a chaptered story! *crosses fingers*
I don't usually read fanfiction about abusive marriages, but you've managed to handle this very well. Good job!
Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Nope, not chaptered. Glad you like it, Jordan!
Memories Of A Traitor by Furry Little Problem
Rated: 6th-7th Years • Summary: One-Shot, no ships, mild violence, some strong language, slight suggestion of alcohol abuse.
Sirius Black has been locked away in Azkaban for twelve years, only to escape and be locked away again in the house of his father's, locked away with only an unrecognisable friend and haunting memories for company. The memories can never be erased, the guilt can never be forgotten. But when you have lost everything there is to loose, there has to be something - someone - out there to gain.
a good friend can comfort you...a great friend can understand you...but only a true friend can bring you back
Date: 04/29/07 Title: Chapter 1: Memories Of A Traitor
This was a tear jerker for me. The Marauders are pretty much my favorite people ever, so this was hard to get through without bawling.
I liked the transition both characters made, and I also liked how you had the story be from two POV's.
Keep up the great work! You're wonderful!
Author's Response: Thankyou! I\'m really glad you liked it. Yeah, it was hard to write withut bawling too, I can tell you!
Thankyou very much! And thanks SO MUCH for the banner for this story - it\'s wonderful. Absolutely perfect!
Hot Tears and Cold Laughter by tc015
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: "Man is the only animal that laughs and weeps,<
She kicked him hard in the groin, and ran out of the building, laughing at the fact that she was finally free. In the chaos she created, a little girl cried quietly into her lap.
"for he is the only animal that is struck with the difference between what things are
“He was arrested because of you. Sent to a mental institution.”
“He deserved it,” spat Minerva. “He abused me.”
“You just wanted him out of the way. You just wanted to live happily ever after with your old man.”
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"and what they ought to be. "
Minerva walked slowly up the aisle. What was she thinking? She didn’t want to go through with this. Her father had her arm wrapped around his. He seemed happy for his daughter, who was finally settling down.
An entry to "To Laugh or Cry" in the Spring Challenges. I am tc015 of Gryffindor
“You don’t know the full story.”
*Quote by William Hazlitt.
Date: 06/20/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I like this. I don't normally read fanfics centered around Minerva and Dolores, simply because they despise each other, but I like how you've done this.
Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks!
FourFold by Furry Little Problem
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Ever wondered what happened when Sirius Black ran away from home?
Date: 05/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: Padfoot and Prongs
This story is very good. You're such an excellent writer!
Once again, you portray these emotions extremely well. I really like how you characterized Sirius in this story, and in 'Memories of a Traitor'. James' personality was also spot on.
Keep writing! You're very wonderful!!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! *hugs* you rock. I\'m glads you apporve of my characterisation! Thanks for reading, and for your awesome banners :)
I Am Lily by KASK
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Lily Evans never really questioned what she was told. She was told that she had everything, that others wanted to be her. She was told that she perfect. She never had a reason not to believe them all -- until it all falls apart.
This is for 'The Spring Challenge: To Laugh or Cry'. I am Kask of Slytherin.
Date: 05/13/07 Title: Chapter 1: I Am Lily
Wow, this was wonderful! I must say, I don't usually see stories that portray Lily Evans as anything less than perfect--which is what your whole story was about.
I love the transformation of Lily, and how it was done with her hair. To a teenage girl, hair is a big deal. Bad hair days=end of the world. I love how Lily chopped it off ruthlessly, and I love how she adored it.
Wow, this is pretty much my favorite story. Ever. *adds to faves again and again and again and again*
I'll have fun looking for pictures for your banner. :D
You did an utterly fantastic job. *gushes*
Author's Response: Thank you, Jordan!! I\'m glad you liked it. *hugs*
From Friendship to Betrayal by morsmordre13
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: She had always been his favorite cousin. Through everything their family had put them through, they stuck together. But as they grow older and as secrets are revealed, they grow apart. Soon, love turns to hate and friendship to betrayal.
AU Warning because of some tweaking I did to the Black family tree so it was more to my liking, but other than that it's perfectly canon.
Date: 08/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: From Childhood to Hogwartrs
I love how you've started this story.
I never once stepped back to think that Bella and Sirius could have possibly been friends. I love when author's create plots that really make you think. =]
You've kept everyone in excellent character, which I think is rather hard to do when you're dealing with characters as complex as these two are. We've never seen Bella as anything but cruel, and I love how you've transformed her.
Keep up the awesome work.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love it when I get such long reviews! I\'m glad you thought everyone was in character, because that\'s going to be one of the hardest things to do throughout the story.
I\'m happy you liked it, greeneyes!
Monochrome by Elmindreda
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Black and white. Two perfect colors to form a perfect world. Or at least, so has he thought for almost twenty-two years. One color would always intrude... one way or another.
I am Elmindreda of Gryffindor, and this is my submission for Color of Loss challenge.
Date: 06/24/08 Title: Chapter 1: Monochrome
Um, can I say, "Wwwwwooooooooww" ?! You've probably heard this a dozen times over, and will hear it a dozen times again, but it's like Severus Snape popped into your head and wrote this story himself. I'm absolutely floored. I'm definitely going to check out your other stuff. :)
The insight you give to this story...it's absolutely brilliant. The black, and the white, and the green...oh it's just so good. And the ending line? Wow, what a great way to pack a punch in. Also, I love your transitioning from present to past--and the way the POV changes with it. Usually I'm not an overly huge fan of changes of POV in the story (either between first and third person or between different characters), mainly because I find it difficult for myself and others to get it right. However, you most certainly did. It was just...gah. BRILLIANT.
I love how you developed Severus Snape as a character through the flashbacks. There is a noticeable difference in his personality in the first flashback and the last one. This can also be said about him while narrating in first person. His maturity level changes a lot throughout this story, depending on how old he is, and you nailed it, dead on.
Also--I loved the line: "The only color I would ever let into my perfect monochrome world. The color that made sure my world remained monochrome." It was so good! I read it, and literally said, "Aww," out loud. In my mind, he's saying Lily Evans was the only thing that made his world perfect, or close to it.
I used to be a hardcore Lily/James fan--ever since I first got into fanfiction about four years or so ago. And then DH came out, and changed my view completely. While of course I'm glad Lily ended up with James (otherwise--no Harry), but Lily/Severus will probably always be my OTP. So, this story does wonderful (and also terrible--in a good way) things to my heart.
I honestly can't stop gushing over this story. If anyone ever needs a good Severus fic--with a slightly Lily romance or otherwise--I'm definitely recommending you. You're phenomenal. Please, keep up the amazing work.
Have you ever considered writing seriously, with your own fiction? If you could understand a character of your own as well as you seem to be able to understand Severus, I think you could go very, very far. Keep it in mind.
-Jordan