08/26/05
My Name is Jace, but I am better known as Jacie the Cat thanks to my internet prowls. I don't really write that much anymore, but I've made a point to do every Gauntlet competition, just to keep myself from getting rusty. I am 22 years old, and one of the very few males on the Beta Boards.
Aside from writing, I enjoy playing guitar and songwriting (despite the drawback of being unable to read music) as well as other means of story-telling such as being the anecdote machine in social settings, and telling fantastic lies to small children. EG: The canopener was invented 37 years before the can, George Washington lobbied to have Congress declare termites a type of gum disease, and Santa won't give you any presents if you leave soy milk and Kashi cereal bars out on Christmas.
- Jacie the Cat
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Avenged Sevenfold by SecretKeeper
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
UPDATE: Guys, I'm back!
The innocence I’ve lost
The blood it's cost
Leaves unhealed scars within.
But I will not abate,
I will employ the hate
That has been planted deep inside.
I will not falter
Valor will not tire,
And I will survive
This trial by fire.
Many things are different now. Potions class is the least of the trio's worries. Battling dragons would be a welcome alternative to what it is they're attempting to battle now. The Order of the Phoenix is hallow without its leading member. And when someone close to Harry is stolen, Dumbledore's rhetoric of love, hope, and faith is challenged. Harry's strength and resolve are pushed to their limits. Loyalties are tested and new leaders emerge while Harry and Hermione struggle to balance new emotions and uncharted territory. Yet while this time after sixth year proves to be drastically unlike anything Harry's ever experienced, some truths remain, and some affections stand solid.
A novel-type story that explores the engimas of Snape, Horcruxes, war, and above all, the puzzle of love. HBP compliant. HHr.
Date: 04/22/06 Title: Chapter 8: Fall From Grace
Ok, I have to tell you that I really love this story. What I love most about it is your attention to detail. Not only in scenery, but also in emotions, in facial expressions, and the tones of voice that is used. I think that this is a very ambitious undertaking, and I believe you are doing an excellent job at it. A7X would be proud.
Cheers,
-Nox.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much Nox... I agree, it is quite the ambitious undertaking. To try and unravel years\' worth of canon and make it believable... definitely one of the greater challenges any fan fic author can attempt. But it warms me and inspires confidence to know you\'re happy with how it\'s gone so far. \"A7X would be proud.\" Wow, thank you. *hug*
Date: 06/04/06 Title: Chapter 9: End of an Era
Wow.. Ok that was probably one the longest "first kiss" scenes I've ever read that actually *works*. You see, most scenes with a first kiss between anyone is either too long to work, or too short, and kind of akward. You made the scene play out beautifully, it wasn't too much or too little.
Another thing I thought was amazing was I was feeling the same emotions that Harry and Hermione were. You portrayed everything about that scene with a kind of subtlety, and you kept making me wonder "is this gonna be the chapter? Are they going to kiss?"
I also think that it was brilliant to have it at the end of the chapter, which built up the tension between Harry and Hermione.
Excellent chapter! I'm so glad I put this story on my favorites list, because this chapter is a **MUST-READ** 10/10 for this Chapter. Keep up the exceptional work!
Date: 10/02/06 Title: Chapter 12: Inhale
I liked this chapter, as it focused mainly on the development of Harry and Hermione. Coming from a male perspective, I believe I know what Harry was trying to tell her, and you did an incredible job depicting it.
I was pleasantly surprised by the accuracy of the Alexander/Aristotle section in the dementors reference. I thought that was really clever, too. You did a great job.
No mistakes were noticed as I read this, and being as anal about gramatical errors as I am, that's a very good thing for ya!
Great job!
- Jacie the Cat
Date: 04/16/07 Title: Chapter 15: Knocks on Doors
You know what I love about your writing? Unlike most fics I read (including my own), you write your characters as though they have been through all of the books in the actual time span. It was just a few months ago that Albus died. It was a year or so ago that Sirius died. Your writing is in real time, and all the layers of characterization and emotion (especially in Harry and Hermione) shows that perfectly.
I'll tell you right now (and I'm being honest), if your last chapter was submitted at 11:59 on July 20th, I'd rather read it than go to the midnight release of Deathly Hallows. You're that good.
- Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: *Blushes furiously* Jacie-- thank you so, so much. I can\'t tell you how much this review meant to me, especially knowing from whom it came. :) It amazes me that you continue to support the story even after so much time has passed. I feel truly indebted to your loyalty. *hugs* Thanks again.
Date: 10/10/06 Title: Chapter 13: And Embers Rise
Wow! Just... wow! What an amazing chapter! Ok.. review time..
In the 19th paragraph of the flashback, I did notice a missing quotation after Harry exclamation. That in combinaton with the italics/lack thereof made me pause before continuing. Other than that, the gramar was wonderful.
The flashback's descriptiveness was rather unnerving. I must tell you, that you described the physical feelings perfectly. (I don't know if you've had someone close to you die, but I have and it was very close.)
I really appreciated the final author's note, too. I've had three stories on MNFF that I've deleted because of flaming reviews. Once, I had someone angry because of a character wanting to commit suicide and she felt it was immoral for me to portray suicide in any positive light.
Lastly, I want to say thanks, Sadie. It makes me feel so appreciated as a reviewer for you to dedicate the chapter to me.
- Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: Hey! Wow, thanks so much for pointing out that error. I\'ll go fix it. :) And I really appreciate your comments about the flashback. I\'ve been very fortunate to never have anyone too terribly close to me die, but I tried putting myself in that position so that I could describe it properly. I\'m glad you think it worked, because it was a painful state of mind, trying to imagine my brother dead for the purposes of the story. And I understand your issues with the flames. I actually have a story up (Fifteen Minutes) that almost portrays suicide in a noble light as well. *sigh* I\'m sorry the flames caused you to take down your stories, however. I\'m sure they were great. And you\'re welcome for the dedication, love. You deserved it. *hug* Oh, by the way-- do you have a song of yours online? I seem to remember listening to a song by \"blackhairedweasley\" recently. Could that have been you?
Barty's Story by Cruciatus Love
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Barty Crouch Jr. is willing to give up everything for his master. He would go to any great length do to His bidding.
Follow Barty as he takes his steps through the Quidditch World Cup in GoF. What parts of the story did you miss while reading from Harry's point of view? This is the side of the story that you really care about.
Date: 08/22/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Quidditch World Cup
Hey, Shayla! I liked the way you switched from Winky to Barty. That made it play out like I was watching a film, which I think was the intention. I did find a few spelling errors in the 21st and 26th paragraghs, but that's it, really. Great job, hun! - Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: Bleh, I hate spelling. I foten wonder how this ever got validated on MNFF so long ago. But thanks for your words. I, too, liked the switch between characters.
Mummy Loves You by expecto_patronum_this
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The night of Lily and James's death. As Lily watches the Dark Lord destroy everything in her life she has ever cared for, she realizes that she must explain to Harry why she can't be there for him forever, and make sure he knows that "Mummy loves you..."
Date: 06/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Mummy Loves You
Hmm.. Not bad, actually. One thing I thought was a little off was the blood coming from Lily's mouth after she was killed, since the Killing Curse leaves no physical damage to the body. I thought it was great otherwise, though. Great job!
Author's Response: Oh really? I didn\'t actually think of that. Thanks for the information - I\'ll go back and change that when I have the time. Thanks for the review!
The End by lily_evans34
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: This story is told in Cedric's POV before, and after, he dies. One shot, taking place the night of the Third Task.
Date: 07/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: The End
Very nice story. I liked how during the second half Cedric seemed to know things he didn't before he died, but it wasn't obvious, just implied.
I thought you took subtlety to your advantage on this story, which is a rather hard thing to do. Great job!
- Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, Jacie!
Date: 07/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: The End
Very nice story. I liked how during the second half Cedric seemed to know things he didn't before he died, but it wasn't obvious, just implied.
I thought you took subtlety to your advantage on this story, which is a rather hard thing to do. Great job!
- Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: Double post :P
Born on the Streets by Cruciatus Love
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A young woman tells the tale of how she started her life completely alone with no one to turn to, and ends it the same way. She describes how she worked her way up the mountain to find everything she ever wanted, or could ever love, and how she was pushed back down it into the same place she started from. Listen to her as she shows you the story of her doomed life.
Written by Cruciatus Love of Slytherin for the June/July Monthly Challenge option three.
Date: 08/06/06 Title: Chapter 1: Born on the Streets
Excellent story, Shayla. What I like most about it is that it's completely different from the book, but doesn't defy cannon. That's a hard feat to pull off.
I also liked the way you switched back and forth from narrative to third person styles. At first I thought that you didn't know which style you liked better, but after it was done I understood much better.
Great story, dear!
- Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: *giggle* I try my best, Jacie.
Thanks for the review!
Through the Eyes of an Onlooker by Cruciatus Love
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: The House of Black may look beautifully decorated and filled with life through the eyes of someone who had never lived there, but when two boys have spent their entire childhood suffering the pain their family gave them, this same house looks only melancholy and depressing.
Date: 08/22/06 Title: Chapter 1: That Fateful Night
Ohh, nice story, Shayla! I loved the connection you described between the two, dispite them seeming to hate one another. I did, however, notice a bit of American slang in the sentance "She’s already yelled at me to the freaking point of insanity." That seemed to throw me off a little.. Keep up the great work, Shayla! - Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: Pfft, yeah. \"Freaking\". We do say that a lot when we don\'t want to swear. But thanks for the kind review, Jace.
I Will Show Them by malko050987
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: She is determined to show them that she too, is a capable witch.
Date: 08/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: I Will Show Them
Hey, Chris! Great story and great idea, too. I really liked the fact that you didn't paint Fleur as the popular girl, which is how her character is usually typecast.
I did notice a small mistake at the end in the third-to-last paragraph -
"The carraige was very close to the ground now, amd she could see the trees in the distance. They were not frienly, wizened trees."
The spelling errors for And and Friendly were the only mistakes I noticed. Keep writing! I love reading your fics!
- Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: Jace! Thanks for reviewing :) I\'m glad you enjoyed the story :D The mistakes are in the end because I added that part before posting the story, and my beta didn\'t get to see them :D
Thanks for the review :)
Chris, who is off to correct some mistakes
I Can't Love Her by Cruciatus Love
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Tom Riddle knows that his Merope is a charmed woman, but he doesn't quite know how far that goes. When it comes to their wedding day, he tries with all his might to release himself from 'her spell'. Little does he know that magic really might be worked into the situation, and that gaining back control is the hardest thing he can try to do.
Written for the Summer Weddings Challenge by Cruciatus Love of Slytherin.
Date: 08/22/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Day Before
Wow.. Just... wow. You know, that description of Tom was so accurate that it makes me wonder if I've been on a love potion! Seriously, Shayla, great work! You conveyed Tom's emotions extremely well and it was great to show that even Merope knew that he felt forced into it all. Highly reccomended! - Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: Aww, Jacie, you make me squee. Thanks. I needed that.
I AM a Killer by Cruciatus Love
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Draco Malfoy has had enough of everyone telling him who he is. He's had enough of other people wanting him to be who they want him to be. He wants to show the world that he's his own person, and that if he sets his mind on something he will do it. He will show the world that he truely is the dark character he says he is.
Written for the Extra Credit Challenge by Cruciatus Love of Slytherin.
Date: 08/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Killing
Hmm.. Interesting, Shayla...
I love the anger you protray in him, something that Draco!fangirl authors sincerely lack these days. You protrayed him as the boy thirsting to prove himself as most of us see him as. A couple errors were noticed, but nothing to get in a twist over. Great job, Shayla! You continue to impress me!
- Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: Hey! *scowl* I am NOT a Draco!fangirl, Jacie. Hehe. But I\'m glad you liked it. Thanks for the review!
Christmas Snow by lily_evans34
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: We all know the story of how James matured for Lily. Ever wonder why? Who would have thought that everything could change in a single day-with an unexpected romance, and a little bit of snow.
Written for Beth for the Secret SPEW 2.
Date: 01/18/07 Title: Chapter 1: Christmas Snow
Hey Rachel! Great story, here. You know what I liked best about this? You seemed to have some of Harry's attributes within James, but he was still very different. (Case in point - Harry wouldn't be so bold as to just lean in and kiss a girl a year older than him.)
Being a winter person, I really love these kinds of stories. It was a Christmas story, but then again, not quite. I also loved you throwing the "what if's" in there without disrupting cannon. This was a great one-shot.
- Jacie the Cat
Author's Response: My review plee worked? Gasp! And squee! Thank you sooo much for taking the time to review this, Jace! And I\'m really glad you liked it. Yeah, it was hard, because my prompt was \'an unlikely pairing share a moment at Christmastime\'. So I thought Beth=James. But then...how to write James without James/Lily? *snorts* So, I\'m glad you found it believable, and not canon-disruptive. Thanks again! *hugs*