Lily Evans and James Potter share absolutely nothing in common, not even their feelings for each other. Lily, perceived as a ‘model student,’ detests the handsome, popular, Quidditch star James, who she thinks to be something of a git. James, on the contrary, has been infatuated with Lily for years, and has let her and the whole school know it.
As time progresses into Voldemort’s ‘reign of terror,’ the two have to learn to trust, tolerate, and love each other.
Please note, this story is incomplete, and will likely remain so for a long time. I apologize!
What a wonderful story! Really fantastic! I just read it but it looks as though you haven't updated in a while and I think it would be a grand idea to update soon.
Ok, obviously i love it since i've stuck with it this far, seriously, it was awesome. I loved the story line, sometimes a bit too fluffy, but you know, obviously it fit. And just to let you know in a few of the chapters you were spelling crucio, 'cruico'. Just a little nit- picking :) Now all I want to see is a sequel about Anna and Nathan because I absolutely am in love with both of their characters!!! AWESOME JOB! Keep up the great writing!
Author's Response: lol - you are the first person to ever point out that particular spelling error! And a big one at that. My apologies! Despite that, I\'m glad you\'re enjoying it, over the top fluff and all. :) Thanks!
This was brilliant. I've really never read anything like it. The time changing. The pictures. The sheets. I loved it, I trully did. I was so locked into reading this that I couldn't even hear what was going on around me. I can hardly even put into words how wonderful this was. And now I'm rambling about it's wonderfullness, which obviously mean I can put it into words. Anyway, great writing :) Now I'm off to read more of your work.
Messrs. Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs -- These names are known by every person in Hogwarts. These names, and an envelope with a scarlet wax seal bearing the letters: MWPP.
The teachers dread it, the students revel in it...but who are these 'Marauders,' as they are called? That's just it. Nobody knows. Most every prank Hogwarts sees is at the hands of these mysterious Marauders, and the perpetrators always walk free. They could never be caught. You can’t catch phantoms.
Lily Evans is just as curious as the next student as to who these Marauders are, but her curiosity is transformed into a hungry need, when she receives a letter herself from a certain Mr. Prongs.
[This story is slightly AU, but more on that in the author's note at the end.]
This is a great story! Although it doesn't COMPLETELY follow canon... it's cool because your own canon makes the story different. Great writing, can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response: Thanks so much dear!
I've seen this done a couple of times, but you really seemed to hit the Marauders head on! At first, you introduced Remus' thoughts so well-- they seemed just like him! Then as the story moved along, you brought the other three in and you did equally as well with their characterization. You didn't even leave Peter out, and you didn't make him a blubbering idiot. Props to you for that.
Now-- you're Remus. I absolutely loved the fact that you wrote him as sarcastic and snarky, not the timid Remus that I'm so used to seeing. You hit him perfectly-- just the way I see him in the books, and you took it back to his childhood. He wasn't abashed or nervous about his friend's seeing his cuts as he tends to be in fanfic. You took advantage of his real personality and made a scene with the Marauders that was hilarious! I had a grin on my face the whole time.
Lovely job!
--Kat [from MWPP class]
That was nice. I've never really seen anything much like it. I like how you didn't completely ignore Peter or make him seem like a bumbling idiot, like so many Marauder fic writers seem to do. I also liked how you write Remus, usually people portray him as an quiet, straight-edge kid, but he was relatively normal in this one, especially since it was the morning after. I do think Sirius' outburst was a bit melodramatic, but other than that, I thought it was a wonderful fic.
This is a great story! Your characterization was fantastic, expecially of Sirius and James, they really were wonderful. I really liked the ending of the story, when Sirius says he thinks the teachers have been Imperiused, that made me laugh. Very nice job, keep up the fantastic writing!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Wow! This is so amazing-- really. I've never seen anything like it, and you developed everything quite well. And I also like how you added the verses? Song? Whatever it is-- kudos for creativity!
Author's Response: Thank you. ^_^ Great to hear that the adding for those verses helped to improve this story.
What a wonderfully, fluffy story! The lead in parts about how Remus was even worried about loving someone while he was at Hogwarts was really wonderful background for his problem that he still has now. But I did think is was rather abrupt how Remus confessed that he loved Tonks. But I also liked ow you took Jo's scene from her book and showed more detail and what actually happened between Remus and Tonks. Rather good writing as well, nice work!
Author's Response: Thank you for your criticisms and praise. I did not want it to feel abrupt when Lupin confessed to Tonks, but rather, there is only so much a person can hold inside and at some point it will all come bursting out. Does that make any sense? I will try to look back over the piece and see if I can make it transition better. Thanks again.
This is good, a little bit odd to have Harry and Hermione related, howere distantly. But whatever, artistic license. I like fics that are behind the scenes, and I have never seen one like this before! Props for originality. I like hoe the Hat gave reasons for her to be in Gryffindor, very good idea. I always wondered why Hermione wasn't put into Ravenclaw originally. Good writing, keep it up!
Good start off! Just wanted to let you know, when she is yelling at Christopher I think her dialogue isn't correct, because the sentence doesn't make sense. Very interesting, I like how Christopher mildly mentions Sirius and then... in your next chapter...! Very nice job, and good writing. I absolutely love the ideas that you have, and your originality!
Author's Response: Original...Yeah, that\'s me. Though I try to make Pepper like Sirius...so sometimes I don\'t know what\'s mine and what\'s JKR\'s in that girl. She\'s kind of a blend. The gossip addiction is all mine...Next chapter should be up really soon!
Author's Response: Original...Yeah, that\'s me. Though I try to make Pepper like Sirius...so sometimes I don\'t know what\'s mine and what\'s JKR\'s in that girl. She\'s kind of a blend. The gossip addiction is all mine...Next chapter should be up really soon!
Good start off! I've never read anything like this (so far) that comes from Hermione's POV at this point in time and I like how you wrote something original. Very well done!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Wow, that was... chilling. I've never seen anything like this before. You seemed to hit the emotions so perfectly. Bella is definitely the one to feel relief at her husband's death. Whether or not he was cruel, I don't think she loved him. ANYWAY. Now is not the time for that discussion. Right.
I've never really thought of Bella having a close relationship with her sister(s). I always thought that maybe Andromeda and Narcissa were closer and Bell was simply above them. This story, however, made me think that all along, my beliefs have been wrong. Didn't change my beliefs, no, but it definitely brought in another source, of you will. Okay, OT again. >.>
You did a lovely job with Bella's character. How could you not? You are the Keeper of Bella, after all. Especially at the very end. She was so precise and didn't think before she acted. I mean, just firing the AK without a second thought that it could be someone other than the voice of her husband is pretty impulsive. Then to end her own life without a second thought? That just SCREAMS Bella to me.
Anyway, lovely job. :] You've inspired me to write a Bella fic of my own.
--Kat
Author's Response: Bella is a tad impulsive. She might\'ve had an easier life if she stopped to think before doing something stupid. Then again, maybe not. As much as I love her, she really does seem to lack common sense. Anyway, I\'m glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for the review. As for a Bella story of your own, go for it. I\'d read it.
This was a great one shot! I love your description, it really drew me in. I felt like I was actually there with the characters. I particularly like how you made Peter such a large part of this, since he is usually ignored :] And of course I loved the Wolfstar bit. Great job!
This is ah-maze-ing. I was hooked from the first word. Fear draws every human, does it not? The style in which you write this was stunning. It seemed almost still, and then suddenly it would speed up, then halt again. Your style was just like the title, him? I read through it three times before I left you this review, actually. It was so enticing and vivid. I love how you described the dust--
Sluggish particles doggedly plough into pattern, ready to expect the unexpected, swirl and swirl and dance with unknown energy.
O.O
Seriously, the image that immediately pops into mind at that statement embodies the utter chaos that you so eloquently describe here. It's almost... metaphorical, perhaps? Also, the way you used the parenthesis was awesome too. I am usually not a fan of parenthesis in writing because it tends to slow it down, but in this case, it seemed to do just the opposite. Wonderful, wonderful job!
--Kat
Wow. I have always heard people rant and rave about this fic, but I have just now gotten around to reading it. And I must say, they definitely had a reason to rant and rave.
I love the twist at the end. It totally made the story. It was the cutest thing how they said "too" to each other. Such a personally lovely tidbit that makes the fic just that much more unique. Really, great job with the originality. I have never and will never read anything like this again, I'm sure. I mean, that's why it's featured, right? :D You did a great job with the emotion, as I'm sure you've heard. You mixed horror with love and sadness to such a perfect degree that I am rendered (relatively) speechless.
I think you also hit head on with the Harry you wrote. Going through the pain and resorting to whatever he could once his wand was lost. Great Harry, seriously. I rarely say that either because Harry is the hardest to write (IMO), so I have the toughest judgment on his character in fanfics.
Anyway, great job all around :D
--Kat
Author's Response:
Rant and rave? Is that a bad thing :( or a good thing :)? Thanks for the review though and to say that I did a great job on Harry is very humbling because your right, he is one of the hardest to write. I actuall modled 'dad' Harry after my own hubby and me and how we react when our kids are hurt. I don't know really know where this story came from and I havn't really been able to write anything quite like it since. I am hoping it was because of the raw emotions of my own 'Catherine' getting hurt, and if that was it, then I hope to never write anything this good again (meaning I don't want my kids to get hurt just so I can write good stories.)
~Kristy
This is a beautiful beginning. I don't think I have ever felt as much emotion when reading a fanfic as I have when I read this one. You are a very talented writer and I can't wait to see what this story holds for the future!
Author's Response: Thanks. The next couple of chapters will be a little slow with the tying up of loose ends. The second is awaiting validation, the third is with my beta and the fourth is still in the writing stage. Hope to have more soon.
Wonderful! This is (obviously) not the first time I've read it, but do you mind if I link it in my beta thread? I really can't get over how much I adore your characterization of Peter. You have done a stunning job :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! Of course you can. Thank you for beta-ing this for me :)
Hello dear :] Just dropping by to let you know that I adore this! It's wonderful to see it up on the site so soon!
One little thing [I just can't stop!]. Add a quotation here:
"There is also Moony...
Happy writing, darling! Keep up the wonderful work!
Author's Response: Thank you for betaing it! If anyone needs a great beta, contact Mistletoe.
*Claire*
This was so cute! I've read a few of these entries for this challenge, and yours definitely deserved the winning spot =]
I think you did a wonderful job at describing the small town they lived in. The 'hatching from the egg' part was one of my favorites. It all seemed to fit so perfectly that it actually made me excited that you wrote the setting like that. >.> Then how you made the river so ominous and foreboding, only to have it play such a central role in the story was magnificent. Luff it.
The relationship you created between Lily and Severus was perfect as well. You kept them both so IC for being at such a young age. Especially the part when Sev put the dead kittens in the river ... I dunno, maybe it's just men, but that just screamed Severus when I read it. I also really liked how Sev was magical, but Lily didn't know about it yet. That added to it, because in reality I bet Sev was a bit restrained from telling her because he was worried what she might think.
Let's see.. and crit? Not really, no. At one point 'Mum' was lower case when it should have been uppercase... Not a big deal, but here's the line:
"...If [[m]]um asks why you’re crying you’ll have to say something about the river.”
This was a great story that had me grinning all throughout [except of course when Kevin was a little jerk]. So, great job, and this is going in the Slyth Review Fest!
--Kat
Author's Response: Yay, the review fest!\r\nThanks for the review. I was hoping the egg wasn\'t too abstract. Cheers.