Hello.
I am completely brilliant, top of my class, drop dead gorgeous, star of my athletic team of choice depending on the season, the popular one, I can get any guy I want, and if you're actually arrogant enough to believe that, you're in for a surprise. :)
/me
Laura has been a good friend to Percy for seven years. She took his side during a fight between Percy and Oliver their second year. She accepted Percy the way he was, something most of his brothers couldn't even do. And when the one brother who did understand Percy died, Laura was there to help Percy through it, even though the death hurt her greatly as well.
Yes, Laura has been a good friend to Percy. So why, during their seventh year, is Percy allowing his friend to be lonely and miserable?
A fellow Gryffindor decides to try to ease Laura's loneliness by interfering in her life. The result is that Laura must suddenly deal with new relationships, including an unlikely reconciliation with Oliver.
Laura succeeded in being a good friend when she only had one friend. Now she must learn how to be a good friend to several people... including herself. Oliver/OC
Complete!"Thy friendship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy - for friendship's sake." -William Blake
Once again, I love your story and am very impressed even if it was a "filler" chapter, which, it was. I admit, I did start crushing on Elliot for a bit, but... I am ready for another meeting with Oliver... You put in just enough to make me wonder. :) And I'm finally leaving you a review on your page! Nice job...
Once again, I love your story and am very impressed even if it was a "filler" chapter, which, it was. I admit, I did start crushing on Elliot for a bit, but... I am ready for another meeting with Oliver... You put in just enough to make me wonder. :) And I'm finally leaving you a review on your page! Nice job...
Author's Response: Ah, thanks. :) All of the seventh years will be back in the next chapter, Oliver being no exception. Hopefully... no, no hopefully! Certainly! The next chapter will certainly be done before I go back to school in the middle of January! I hope....
Dear Quillster,
I just love your story, so I would deeply appreciate it if you would continue developing it with the amazing ideas and post it so the whole world can appreciate the awesomeness... after all, we can all use more Fred and George!!! :-)
Heart,
The Roommate
PS: Excellent characterization and connection to the real story, like I said, I'm deeply impressed by your skills!
Author's Response: Why, thank you Roommate...wait...do I know you? I definitely try to give my characters flavor and my story a solid foundation in Order of the Phoenix, so I'm glad you're appreciating it. Love, the Quillster
Basically I love this story. You have an excellent Dumbledore. "Absolutley clueless towards everything that is not happening." Yes, I loved that part. It was awesome! And I too will never forget the day that Andrea punched Harry... :) mostly because Fred and George will never forget it! I really like the characterization and everything you put in your story. I can't wait for the next chapters to be up! They're amazing too!!! PS, I heart Andrea... she's sneaky, and she has to be, I mean, she is dating a Weasley after all. And I just love them! :) Nice job--you're amazing!
Author's Response: I'm really glad when people say I've hit Dumbledore right on, because he's a hard character to peg. Trust me, if I felt I didn't had a grasp on Dumbledore, I wouldn't put him in the story at all. And yes, Andrea is sneaky...and George couldn't date any other kind of girl. But you're giving away the sneaky part of the next chapter since you live in the same room as me and thus have already read it.
Hey! Have I ever told you that I heart this story? Because I do. Oh! And I love the sweet moments--George really does have a romantic streak, eh? I love it! Keep up the excellent work!
Author's Response: Yes, I know that you love this story, dearest roommate of mine. I'm glad that you know about it. I'll try to keep up the excellent work, but you know how I feel...this is like kiddie stuff compared to the Marauder story I want so dearly to write...and have actually started writing...
Oh... :) I really do love this chapter. I love Andrea and George! Just reading it makes me happy. So many good parts are in here. I love Fred and George's relationship, I love everything about it. I have already told you how I feel about seeing Sirius. However, I reserve the right to change my mind, so check back with me. :) Excellent work on this one!
Wow... I keep thinking it's the best chapter and then you outdo yourself in a different way. Jocelyn's emotions are amazingly portrayed--I love the subtleties you throw in--with Peter and Sirius and all of them... I pretty much died through the whole break-up scene... very well-written--not too much or too little... keep it up!
Wow... again... wow... I knew Jocelyn was still in love with Sirius... thank you for confirming it as well as leaving me in emotional turmoil over the current situation. What can I say, I love the whole situation--all the characters together, very distinct and real personalities and very real conflicts. What can I say, I'm amazed and you've left me hanging--craving for more... you have a talent for that!!! :-) Can't wait for the rest of the story...
Can I just say... wow... amazing suspense... you had me frustrated, grinning like mad--"How about the I Tutor My Girlfriend in Transfiguration Club?" :-) --very upset, and then squealing with delight... excellent story, but even better style... I love reading your chapters, you say it in just the right way... congrats!!!
I'm in shock... absolute shock... she's going to die... this is so sad. I don't know if I can take this--and count this as two reviews, because my roommate feels the exact same way. We can just tell, and we're dying. So you'd better freaking update soon. Please. Or just leave us hanging forever and we'll just cry our freaking eyes out before hunting you down--like Bellatrix!
Author's Response: I'm not going to kill Jocelyn! Dear God, I don't kill off main characters! However, I will admit that what I do to her is, in my opinion, much worse than death... *evil laughter*
Oh, and I'm really sorry (seriously), I can't update until at least January 9, because I'm in Poland right now and the story is on Will back in California....
Until then, rest assured that death is not the fate that awaits my dear Jocelyn....
Aaaahh... Can I just say that I found your story and I love it. You have a great story line going on--not as emotional as some, but that's okay--I like the style very much. But this chapter just killed me (in a good way). I like the way you brought James & Lily together... And I re-read that last section five times before I decided to tell you how much I loved it... yay!!! :-) Keep it up!
Excellent turn of event... I like how you're playing with the emotions over the break, but are still driving the plot forward--you definitely have a talent for that... I'm ready for what comes next!
*sigh* I absolutely loved the James/Lily conversation at the end... so completely in character for both of them--you're amazing! I also really like the inner conflict that's becoming more and more prominent with Sirius... it's very, VERY good as well as intriguing... I also am interested to see how the whole Jocelyn thing plays out... I like your comment on how you're not sure if ANYONE is good for her--I can see that portrayed in the way you write about her... interesting... but very good! :-)
Okay, so I've just read your entire story. All I have to say is, "Wow." Wow. That's it. I love it; I absolutely love it. You have amazing characterization, plot, style. I'm very much impressed and in awe. I love everything you've done with this story, and I can't wait to read the rest. Thanks for putting this up--amazing writing like this shouldn't be hidden away. This was awesome. Really...
Yes, I’m back. :) And it’s official. I’m happy to be caught up on the Remus story.
First, I would like to point out how delectably cruel and perfect it was to steal Lindi away again before they actually get to kiss. It was a wonderful build up and release without dropping the emotional height of the story.
Then, the way Remus told, or didn’t tell, his friends what had happened was perfect. You wrote it so deliberately and sincerely that I could feel the butterflies in his stomach from eager anticipation and joyful memories as I was reading it. But then again, you always did have a way with portraying an excellent Remus character.
I love how you continue to develop the multiple plotlines while still remaining true to your ‘Remus-centric’ theme. The Lindi/Darlene scenarios are well written. I am also fond of the way you develop the James/Lily scenes without over-doing them or rushing them. It’s nice to see Lily coming around without immediately falling for James.
My favorite part of this chapter was the note paper. First, I think it’s absolutely brilliant that the Marauders communicate like this. Because they would. Second, it was fun to see a complete high school approach to genuine flirting. Although flirting is fun in person, it’s nice to see them flirt so openly without getting tongue-tied. And it’s the perfect Marauder Remus side to his personality that we don’t always see.
Great work on this chapter. You kept us in suspense and laughing in the same chapter. You also reminded us of several important points of the character of Remus: his marauder side, his romantic side, and his uniquely Remus side. Nice job!
Author's Response: I am so glad you are back, Roommate! There is a thread on the forums for awesome reviews, and I would post all of yours, but for the fact they have a 100 word limit. I am so glad you are enjoying the side stories. I think they keep me interested even though they are at times the result of my mind wandering. :*) And I\'m glad you liked the flirting. I had so much fun with that. I refuse to believe that Remus wasn\'t at heart a normal teenager and yes, a Marauder to the core. Have I said lately that I love Remus? And I love your reviews. Thank you!
After leaving us with a perfect moment of bliss (I love it when you use that phrase), you bring us back to reality. :) And the fun begins. The witty banter completely met the standard you’ve set in your story — including the CPR discussion and crystal ball of their futures.
You continue bringing in Severus Snape. I will be quite intrigued to see what you do with the tension you’ve built and what has to inevitably happen between him and Remus. However, I do think you’ve hit Remus’s personality accurately — he is by far the most patient of all the Marauders.
Which brings me to the punch. Of all the things to put in the punch, the blabbing potion or whatever it was, was an excellent choice. It was nice to see the disasters coming up as well as to hear what was on everyone’s mind. For once it was nice to see Lindi as outspoken as she was — even if it wasn’t really her. You took a nice opportunity to showcase her thoughts without disrupting the integrity of your storyline.
Personally, I don’t love the idea of Sirius as a complete ladies man in real life. But, you write it well and keep the camaraderie of the Marauders consistent, which is the more important thing.
Once again, after the almost forty chapter build-up, it’s nice to see Remus happy. And with Lindi. :) You’ve hit their romantic innocence right on the mark, and it’s nice to finally have them together.
Author's Response: :*) You like the moment of bliss phrase? *dies* Sometimes I look at the title and have considered pulling a KFC. You know, they don\'t ever call it Kentucky Fried Chicken anymore. LOL Would you all be able to find the story if I change the title simply to MoB? A long time ago, one of the funnier people over on the forums started poking fun at story titles (all in good fun). It was one of the funniest things I\'ve read, but I was so worried she\'d get a hold of MoB. *dies* Part of me was hoping she would, and another was dreading it. Fortunately or unfortunately, she was made to stop. :( Still, I throw the title in once in a while, don\'t I? Not sure why. Maybe I\'m a masochist. LOL Anyway, I\'m glad you like it. It makes me feel a little better about it.
Severus...he is complicated for me. I hope I do him justice, though I will admit that I will likely take the coward’s way out and probably not focus on him any more than I feel is absolutely necessary. :*/
Ladies man Sirius... :*) I can\'t help myself...40 chapter build up...*dies again*
This review...wonderful. Thank you, again Roommate.
I find it interesting and good that when you bring us back from Christmas holiday, you also bring us back into wizarding current events. It’s not pleasant (but neither is returning to school after a holiday) but the parallel emotion was a nice touch.
I also am interested in how subtly you continue to change and adapt Peter’s character. I don’t think he’s completely thought out. It’s like sometimes you remember that he becomes the traitor and so you throw in something almost… obvious that reminds the readers that he’s not the good guy. But then you’ll revert back to him acting as a typical marauder.
Peter blushed, but looked around nervously before he answered in a hushed voice as his mother had done. “Lord V-Voldemort.”
Although this is appropriate and possibly accurate, it was kind of thrown at us. And then not mentioned again. Perhaps think of evening him out to make him more consistent.
I liked bringing Will Chambers back. I happen to have a mini-crush on him because of the small details you’ve included about him. My favorite line was this:
“He’s a Hit Wizard?” Oh, brilliant…I have a Hit Wizard threatening me if he thinks I mistreat her.
The best part about this was how nonchalantly Lindi mentioned her cousin’s line of work and how seriously it affects Remus. How utterly evil of you to add another stress to Remus’s self-consciousness about dating the beautiful Lindi. :) I thought it was brilliant. And it was brilliant because you didn’t focus or panic about it. You just mentioned it and moved on even though it was something that will probably pop up in the back of Remus’s mind for a while — particularly considering the setting he first met Will the Hit Wizard in. Nice work at this detail. But that’s something you’re usually very on top of is including the details that make your story significant and your characters real.
Author's Response: Wow, another amazing review. Forgive me for taking so very long to respond. Peter...Peter is difficult. I understand and fully agree with your assessment that he is uneven. The problem is, I see him that way. I don\'t mean you are wrong at all. It is a problem I have. I just think there would be little hints that would show up and I feel the need to hint, though I know they are rather obvious, yet I don\'t know if it is because we all know the truth about him, or if I\'m just being too obvious. Does that make sense? I will definitely try to be more aware of him. The miserable little *^*&^*&
One thing I enjoy is writing things that my characters are oblivious to, ie Lindi\'s oblivion to the impact her statements have on Remus and his life. Being omniscient can be fun. *hehehe* Or should that be *muwahahaha* Well, thank you for this very lovely and helpful review. I will keep your points on Peter in mind. You may have to keep on me, because I do find him a chore. :-P Thanks, Roommate.
I love how precious and delicately you approach the all-important topic of Remus, a werewolf, dating a beautiful young lady. Remus’s wishes were so lovely and honest. It was quite in character for him to be in awe and gratitude for having such a treasure to hold. It was a lovely moment to read.
Then came the duel with the Marauders. Although it was completely brilliant and great fun, it felt a bit weak for the four of them. I know they were playing nice because Lindi was there. But it seems like if one of them gets to do the teasing, somehow all of them would join in at one point—after all, they are boys. Even though Sirius wanted to make a point, the boys were lighthearted and I could completely see them joining in the fun because they were a little bored or just couldn’t keep them out of the action. Particularly when Lily walked in, I could see a hex miss aiming and James and Lily joining in the duel. Just a personal thought. Though I did like how you resolved it and got them talking about students involved with Death Eaters.
Once again, you leave us loving the characters. This was a lovely filler chapter. One of those life experience chapters where nothing spectacular happens, but people exist. Sometimes I like a little more detail that you so perfectly give about characters and their thoughts and emotions. Or even the little things that Remus notices.
But, I do say that leaving us wanting more was the best thing you could have done. I’d almost forgotten about field day, and now I’m so ready to see Lindi take on James and see who wins whatever bet.
Author's Response: Oh, Roommate, I am so ashamed! It has taken me far too long to get to these absolutely fabulous reviews. I have no good excuse. Please forgive me. I am struggling with the next chapter, to the point I\'m ready to delete the whole story, (Of course, I won\'t, but I want to!) and I can\'t seem to have a coherent thought about anything related to it, including reviews with such depth as you have given me here. I promise to make a proper response as soon as I finish the blooming chapter. Please forgive me until then and thank you for taking the time (considerable time, I\'d say) to share your thoughts with me. And I\'m so glad you are back! :)
Author's Response: Oh, Roommate, I am so ashamed! It has taken me far too long to get to these absolutely fabulous reviews. I have no good excuse. Please forgive me. I am struggling with the next chapter, to the point I\'m ready to delete the whole story, (Of course, I won\'t, but I want to!) and I can\'t seem to have a coherent thought about anything related to it, including reviews with such depth as you have given me here. I promise to make a proper response as soon as I finish the blooming chapter. Please forgive me until then and thank you for taking the time (considerable time, I\'d say) to share your thoughts with me. And I\'m so glad you are back! :)
I love your story. No joke. Remus' dad... simply brilliant characterization! You're amazing. This is one of my favorite chapters... it was the first one I read of your story... so I've read it twice now, and I love it. Nice job! And I agree with the earlier comment that your writing has improved... it's looking great and I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter--I happen to know it's in the queue!
Author's Response: Oh, my, you read the last chapter first? lol. Are you one of those people who reads the last page of a novel before starting it? I am so glad you liked it enough to try out the rest of my story. Is it terribly immodest of me to say I’m glad it was this chapter you decided to try first as I must agree it is one of my best? I enjoyed writing the dialogue with Remus and his dad so much and am thrilled you like Richard. It really is gratifying and a huge relief when readers approve of the way I have written a character. Thanks so much.
Can I just say that you are amazing. Thank you for making Lucius Malfoy the right age! So many people put him in the same year as the Marauders and it drives me crazy! I cheered when I read that, and so did my roommate when I told her. So props for you and keep up the great work on your story!
Author's Response: By all means, you can say it if you like. *grin* I’ll definitely take it while I can. As I’ve said before, some chapters are easier to write. Just be gentle when I slip. You’re welcome for Lucius. I do try my best to keep canon straight. Thanks so much for your encouragement. I’ll do my very best.