i luved it. though if i were you, id have made harry "cinderella" since he did grow up with rather evil people, but your way was just as good. better.

My name is Jordan! Though I'm a girl... 10/10

Author's Response: *lol* :D

You like writing Irish and Scottish accents, don't you?

I feel a bit hypocritical, because I always say that if a story is in your favorites you should at least review it once. Your story has been in my favorites list for a while, yet this is the first time (I think...) I've reviewed it. So let me apologize ahead for what is going to be a long review, since I'm reviewing all the chapters.

First off, the plot. I've seen several marriage contract stories before (surprisingly a lot, actually) but so far yours is my favorite. You gave it a little twist, what with the Goyle contracting for Hermione too thing (that I was NOT expecting). Plus, I love how Hermione and Oliver don't get along swimmingly. I think their arguing is cute, in a somewhat weird way o.O

I really like Oliver in this story. (Although I don't remember him having an accent in the books.) Instead of making him Hermione's knight-in-shining-armor, you gave him flaws (and, yes, I've seen people turn canon characters in Mary-/Gary-Sues). He's an enjoyable character to read about, and I've never seen a drunk person mess things up so badly before. :D Then there's his family, which I find hilarious, even though I'm having trouble understanding some of what they say.

There's also Hermione, who you've managed to keep in character and yet make her so much more grown up. Your Hermione handled the contract in such a Hermione-like way, it was wonderful.

All in all, you're a master, and I bow down to you. I've read all of your fics and enjoyed them very much, what with your way of capturing characters so well and weaving your own dry, sort of tongue-in-the-cheek humor. And the chapters are long, so who can complain? For once I actually don't have anything to tell you to imrpove upon, except for a few minor errors here and there. I tip my hat to thee.

-Jordan

Author's Response: No! Don\'t appologize for a long review, ever! Reviews like this are the greatest reward for all of the frustration and late nights when trying to turn out a multi-chaptered story like this. *huggles*

No, you\'re right. in teh books, JKR didn\'t give him an accent, though from the fact that Harry knew right away when McGonagall introduced them that Wood was Scottish shows that he has one! *lol*

Somehow, I like their arguing too. It makes them, well, them. I agree with you, sometimes even cannon characters can be turned into author insertions, and I\'m so glad to hear when people find my interpritations of JKR\'s characters satisfying and believable.

You know, the humor is always the part I worry about most. I don\'t consider myself a naturally funny person - I probably tell lousy jokes, and all my humour is very dry. I\'m so glad it comes across here :-)

So far, so good! It was a little OOC with Harry playing the guitar, but it was sweet, none the less.

I read the last line and shivered. It was just that eery.

I don't believe I've ever read this story, mainly because I read it over at the other site you have it posted at.

Maddy, you have an amazing skill. Your details, your dialogue... nothing is out of place. Your style of writing has such grace and perception-- you're one of those type of authors that make people think.

The ending was truly depressing, yet it was so beautiful. Your talk about love made my head spin (in a good way), which only happens when I am overwhelmed. And I was overwhelmed by this story. The thought that someone so young can write as well as this is scary.

I have nothing to critisize. You have set a new bar for fan fiction writers on MNFF.

Haha. I like your story a lot so far!

wheres the next chapter?? anyways, its really good so far, and i cant wait to see where you go with the plot. points subtracted for copying the whole tom riddle diary thing though

Yes, I saw Mudblood428's picture... which is why I came to read it! (She's such a good artist...) It was a great fic, written very well. I haven't read many R/Hr stories in my day, but this one takes the cake. Good job!

I read this fic so I could join the Susan Bones' Book Club, and all I can say is WOW. What a great story and what a great message. I did not expect that Hermione would be the little girl he helped, but if you think about the clues you made (like the thing with the toothbrush) it all makes sense.

Excellent. Superb.

By far the best L/J fic I have ever read!! The Marauders were amazingly in character, and you had me laughing to the last bit.