YAAAY! This is very cute. I don't normally like shippiness, but it's adorable. And it's funny how in this story, Harry took her hand and then apologized about it, rather than the way he just ran toward her and snogged her in the sixth book. It shows that he still has some emotional growth left to do and some memories left to regain.

Excellent job. My favourite part was “Harry, are you okay? You haven’t blinked for the past five minutes." I also had to snicker at the part where Harry said, "Ginny got physical? I'd like to see that." It struck me as a bit of a double entendre.

Author's Response: I\'m really glad you liked it, Schmergo. I hope shippiness doesn\'t turn you off too much, since there will be some more in the sequel (although nothing really serious). That\'s really just the natural result of Harry being back in contact with Ginny, and Ron and Hermione being an \"item\" (as you may have noticed). I really hope that doesn\'t cause you to drop the story.

Actually, the \"Ginny got physical? I\'d like to see that\" comment wasn\'t originally intended as a double entendre, but as soon as I wrote it I realized the double meaning, and I just had to keep it. *shrug*

EEEEEEEEE! I can't believe it's the end! *Wipes away mingled tears of happiness and sadness*

Ron is SO HILARIOUS in this chapter! He just cracked me up. Everything he said or did was so... Ron-y.

The part with Remus Lupin shouting was a little weird, but I suppose he was distraught. All in all, I really enjoyed this chapter. It was very heart-rending to see that Harry honestly could not remember Sirius. And Ginny and Harry are so adorable in the story!

I can't wait for the sequel! I've added you to my favourite authors list so that I'll know the minute it's validated.

Author's Response: Yay! Double yay! Schmergo likes me! Okay, enough of that. I\'m glad you enjoy the way I write Ron. I think he\'s awesome, and I really try hard to get him right. As for Remus shouting... I know I was sort of going out on a limb there, but I hope he wasn\'t too far out of character. For the most part, I write Remus as very calm, cool, and collected, but in this case he\'s just been reunited with Harry (who doesn\'t remember a thing about him), and he\'s thinking about Sirius, and he just snaps for a second. That\'s my explanation, anyway. Well, I hope to see you in Sequel Land soon!

Oooh. I love this chapter. As always, I think it's so interesting how innocent Harry is. I still really love your characterisation of Molly, and as the plot thickens, I'm getting more and more drawn into this story.

My favourite part is the part where Harry and Molly bury Hassseth, and Harry tells Mrs. Weasley that that's how she looked when she was smiling. I don't know why, but I found that really touching.

Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m really glad you\'re still liking it. I hope the rest of the story doesn\'t disappoint you.

*Is madly in love with this story* It reads exactly like something directly pulled from JK Rowling's own discarded works, possibly written when she was slightly high. This is hilarious and extremely well-characterised.

Author's Response: Ha, \"slightly\" high. Glad you liked it, although perhaps too much. I was aiming for a Jo-type humor, and I guess I hit the mark.

EEESH! Oh my gosh, this is intense. Have you experienced the death of someone you love before, because Hermione's reaction was so realistic and well-written. The description is good, and it leaves me wondering... WHO DIED?!

Author's Response: haha. no, I honestly have never had anyone close to me die. Well, my grandma, but she was so sick, I saw it coming. Thanks so much, Schmergo!

I love Jesse, he's so adorable. Molly's description of Ron was also great, although I personally wouldn't describe him as 'empathetic.' (Still, mums are always so idealistic about their kids...)

This chapter literally made me cry. I love Ron, and the line about Harry going on vacation "To the moon" was somehow really emotionally affecting.

I can't wait for an update!

Author's Response: Haha, I know, Jesse\'s my favorite. But don\'t tell anyone. ;-) And yeah, Ron is probably the most UN-empathetic person, lol, but you always can look back and say what you WISHed they\'d been! Haha. I really liked writing that whole thing, actually. A lot of people say \"on vacation\" but \"to the moon\" sounded better and she wasn\'t really lying - I mean, he did go to the skies, eh? I\'m glad it made you cry. That\'s what I was aiming for! haha.

"I think you're both mad…but can I join in?"
Three words: Ha. Ha. HA! That is amazingly funny. Where did you get the plot bunny for this? *Pauses* Plot bunny! Oh dear, not another unintentional pun? I keep doing that...

I loved the ending. And your characterization of Remus is pretty darn amazing. James being afraid of bunnies is also downright lovely.

Author's Response: Thank you thank you...plot bunny - Maths. Remus characterization...I love him! I write him into everything, so I get way too much practice.

This is amazingly good. I love reading this different perspective of Dean Thomas's life (he's always been an interesting character to me), and the theme of the story made tears spring to my eyes. Incredible.

THIS IS HILARIOUS! I love your characterisation of Snape and Voldy and all of your bizarre analogies, like "Gee, you’re sharper than a page of Oscar Wilde witticisms that's been rolled up into a point, sprinkled with lemon juice and poked into someone’s eye, aren’t you?"

Of course, I couldn't help but think that it sounds like part of Voldemort's plan to destroy the Order of the Phoenix with destructive toasters. Dumbledore should have realised that Talkie could be easily defeated by asking for a strawberry pop-tart, then duct-taping the handle down, and watching it explode.

Wow. Sorry about that. Tangent. I really liked the description of Voldemort, too-- a microwaved Barbie doll head? You know I'm going to have to try that now.

Author's Response: thanks, I\'m really glad you liked it, that means so much. i really like your story too about the dark lord\'s blog so i know what you mean about the pop tarts.

Excellent job! Bill is one of my favourite characters, and there definitely aren't enough fics on this site that give Bill a good part. (And, of course, I'm a bit of a fanatic about ancient Egypt, so I was very excited to see this story.)

You seem to know a lot about the subject and the enviroment (for example, the names and descriptions), which is great, because a lot of fanfiction authors (including me) will sort of invent their own England or Egypt or Romania or whatever without actually doing research on it. You incorporated the myth into the story very well, although I think it would really confuse people who don't know the original story.

I liked your writing style, like in sentences such as "he shot Bill a scathing look, as if he was the personification of every bad quality young people possessed."

Your characterization is great-- especially that of Bill-- and I like Mustafa. The way you depicted Bill as being intelligent and capable while also showing him as obviously young and rather rambunctious was very well-handled.

There were a few places where the punctuation was a little off, such as: “So you thought, maybe they were marking the place, where a tomb is buried in the desert? Just like that?” But all in all, it was a great story! Keep writing!


Author's Response: Thanks for such a brilliant review, Schmergo! I adore Ancient Egypt, too, and did quite a bit of research to get the environment and stuff right, quizzed my mum about every tiny detail she can remember, because she\'s been in Gizah before. Even though the myth isn\'t all that clear from the two short scenes I incorporated, I home at least the basic idea is understandable. Thanks again.