Wow... Sly, this story is absolutely amazing. There are so many things you did wonderfully that I scarcely know where to begin, but I suppose I'll try as best I can.

First of all, your characterization of Hermione was perfect; she somehow managed to stay true to her canon characterization, but it was clear how she has matured throughout the course of the war. Her emotions and her distress were very realistic, and the speech was absolutely beautiful.

"I refuse to stand up here today and pretend that the war didn’t happen. I am not going to pretend that there aren’t students here who have lost their parents and parents here who have lost their children." -This is such a wondeful and truthful statement--just beautiful!

"Our loved ones are gone because of hate.
" This sentence--and the entire paragraph preceding it--was just beautiful. It was eloquently and wonderfully written, and it is also amazing how true it is even in our real-life society. Beautiful.

My only bit of concrit is that "N.E.W.T.s" is supposed to be all capitalised, but other than that this was flawless. Wonderful, wonderful job.

Cheers, Fenn


Author's Response: Thank you so much for all the compliments. You really pulled some of my favorite lines from the story. I\'m glad they left an impact.

Thanks for pointing out N.E.W.T.s. I will try to remember to fix that when it\'s not 2am. ;)

Anyway, thanks so much for the review and I\'m glad you enjoyed the story.

*dies laughing*
Schmergo, this is Hilarious!
You have a very witty and brilliant sense of humor, and not to mention an imagination to envy. I'm not at all surprised that you won the challenge (haha, although I shouldn't be--I saw it posted somewhere =P) and I'm *very* glad I discovered all your fabulous stories.
I can't wait for more stories from you!
Fenn

Author's Response: Awww, thank you! Personally, I think this is my weakest fic so far, but I\'m glad you like my sense of humour. ^__^ I like your stories as well, dude. (I call everyone dude, by the way, regardless of gender.)

Aww, I absolutely loved this story!

Now, I'm usually the anti-Ron/Hermione sort, but I found this story absolutely delightful. It was the perfect mix of substance and fluff; it's adorable from start to finish. Both Ron and Hermione are delightfully in character, and it was such a cute, creative idea... I loved it! Once again, great job. =] This is amazing.

Author's Response: Thanks Fenn, you\'re wonderful. Always happy to please Ron/Hermione haters. :-)

Oh my... That was wonderful.

I was just reading through the fic, thinking how sweet and lovely it was... I was about three lines up from the tombstone engraving and my eyes flicked down... Wow. My jaw just dropped, and by the time I finished I was totally floored. I've never cried for a fic before, but yours brought me pretty close.
A++ It may havae been fluffy and sad, but boy did it get my adreneline going!

Nice fic! I like it a lot, but are you sure you don't want to add some more chapters? (Hint hint) I'd just love some more, it's great!
Pretty please?

Author's Response: Hmm, well, I\'ll have to think about it, FenrirG... I have a lot going on right now, but I\'ll definitely consider it! Thanks for the compliments!! =) --RP

Wow--this is a very amazing poem... it is deep and poingant, and you've really captured Petunia's emotional anguish with remarkable insight and believability,

I love how you managed to stay true to "Annabelle Lee" while maintaining your own distinct style. Your word choice and diction is marvellous; simple yet powerful. My favorite part would have to be:

"Everyday when I look at her son I think thoughts,
Of my beautiful sister Lily.
Every night when I lie in my bed I dream dreams,
Of my beautiful sister Lily.
For I know that when she left a part of me died.
I would give the world to again be by her side,"

Simply beautiful... I am deeply touched by this poem, for it captures Petunia's emotions, regrets, and sorrow so very well... It's beautiful.

~FenrirG

Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much. I really enjoyed writing this. It was a bit of challenge trying to keep true to the meter in \"Annabelle Lee,\" but it helped teach me the importance of word choice. I\'m glad you enjoyed my little poem, and thanks a bunch for the review!

Oh, I really like this story! It sounds like it's off to a great start, and I can't wait for an update. =)
-FenrirG

Author's Response: Thanks! I just got the second chapter back from my beta today, so I hope it will be up soon!

Oh. My. Gosh.

This was simply amazing. It has got to be one of the most beautiful, deep, meaningful fanfictions I've ever met. It's very clear that you've put a lot of thought into the story. It was so very sad, yet heartwarming and beautiful.

I'm so glad I decided to read it. Wonderful, wonderful job.

Author's Response: *Grins* Thank you! :)

Wow! You are an absolutely brilliant writer--I simply love this story. Your imagery is so real and so vibrant... I can almost see the ripples on the lake, and smell the rain as it hits the ground... seriously!

I've personally never found Luna/Draco to be very realistic, but you've portrayed their tumultuous relationship in a very real, believable way. Although Luna isn't acting the way we've grown accustomed to, she is by no means out of character--you really managed to show how Luna has changed, without going into too much detail or backstory.

You've managed to set a very bleak, hopeless mood to the story; that's something not many authors are able to fully achieve. I can almost feel the emotional upheaval Luna and Draco are going through... but it really leaves me dying for more--how did they fall in love, and how will things end? But I suppose that's what makes this fanfiction so amazing... the past and the future are so vague, leaving it open to the reader's own interpretation.

Now, for the nit-picking! I only have a couple small issues.. here they are:

“Oh what haven’t we sacrificed?” There should be a comma after "Oh". =)

Secondly, the last sentence is great--but a teeny bit awkward. Maybe it should be "...every word she used she had learned from him." Just a friendly suggestion. =P

I thought there was one more little thing I was going to point out, but I can't find it anymore--I was to immersed in reading the rest of the fabulous story. Judging by the fact that I can't find it, I guess it is absolutely fine the way it is.

All in all, though, you're a simply amazing author. Your style is beautiful and unique, and you've managed to bring a simple story to life with your wonderful imagery and descriptions. I'm very impressed--keep up the good work, and I can't wait to read more stories from you.

~FenrirG (Fenn)

PS-I see you have a warning for Character Death... but I didn't notice it--am I missing or overlooking something very important?

Author's Response: Thanks so much for this lovely, spew-worthy review. First and foremost your compliments were to rival the text of the story in their vibrancy and quality, and I thank you for them. Secondly, I don\'t think I could auctually write a long-term fiction in which they fall in love. (I don\'t know if I could portray it realistically) Which is the main reason I strayed away from that. The thing with rarepaires is that the only real way to write them is to write the trouble in their relationship, otherwise it comes off as even more unrealistic. Thanks so much for your nit-picking, I really appreciate it. I\'ll go in and fix those things right now. Oh and the character death was that Lucuis Malfoy was killed by Draco, but that\'s fairly minor. I\'d just thought I\'d rather be safe than sorry.

Squee! I'm so happy this is up!!!

Like I said before, this is an amazing poem. Your rhyme scheme is very unique yet beautiful, and the poem is both tremendously fun and deeply poingant. It was such a creative idea to get in the... errr, head?... of a Firebolt... I just love this poem! Keep up the excellent work, and I can't wait to read more poems from you!

*huggles* ~Fenn

Author's Response: Thank you soooo much Fenn!! You\'re making me tear here! ;) I am also so excited this is up.... \"SQEEEE!!\" about sums up my feelings! I got this idea one day while I was daydreaming away from my really boring teacher... I guess occasionally, not paying attention is a good thing! I will write more poems for sure, and probably some one-shots too. I can\'t wait either! Thanks so much, you rock! *double huggles!*