An aspriring writer from California, who is usually too busy studying at university to write. But sometimes she just throws everything down, picks up a pencil and holes herself up in the closet for two or three days, scribbling away.
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Take My Heart Away is a Tom Riddle/Hermione Granger time travel fic.
Fragmentary Blue is a one-shot focused on Harry, which takes place after the end of the second war.
A Certain Slant of Light is a chaptered fic about Regulus Black's stuggle to destroy a horcrux and redeem himself.
Wow. What a scary, dark piece of writing. Not to say that it isn't well written. It's actually very well written... you're one of the few in that aspect.
Plot. Pretty good. I wonder who is in Grimmuald Place, who was screaming, and where the Protkey led to. Definitely off to a good start.
Characterization. You've got Dumbledore down really well. Snape seemed a little... jumpy? Panicky? but then again, who wouldn't panic when being attacked by a werewolf?
I liked the philisophical bit at the beginning. Really cool.
You should really continue, I like this a lot.
Would you mind taking a look at my story? It's called Take My Heart Away, and it's a Riddle/Hermione fic. I think you'd like it, kind of dark.
Here's the link: http://fanfiction.mugglenet.com/viewstory.php?sid=26218&i=1
I can't wait until you post more. Keep writing! :D
Author's Response: I will, don't worry!!!!!!!!
I'm just finishing the second chapter, but I've ben spending more time on a New Battle at the moment - it'll be up soon though!
Thanks for the review ~Ermine the One~
Once again, another brilliant story.
How do you do it? Your style is flawless. I swear, there's not even one WORD out of place. I mean, usually even the best writers make stylistic mistakes, but with you, one sentence just seems to flow into the next and I am never jarred out of the story by strange sentence structure or an out-of-place word.
Your characterization of Sirius is wonderful, like always, and it just makes all other Black-fics pale in comparison.
You are an extraordinarily talented writer with a distinctive style and basically I just love anything you write. ;D
So keep writing!
What a great, astounding piece of writing. The best Regulus fic I've ever read... the images are haunting and beautiful and perfect.
This isn't finished, right? Please say there's more chapters cause its GREAT.
Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for reading & commenting! This story will be continued, yes! My chapter 5 is off to my beta and I\'m actually working on chapter 6 right now. *grins* I just took a break and checked this site and found your lovely message. Look for chapter 5 soon! Thanks for reading!
"But unlike colors or the lost ability to smile, it had been burned into my memory."
Wow, this is truly amazing, Haley. I never knew you were multi-talented. :)
"But unlike colors or the lost ability to smile, it had been burned into my memory."
Wow, this is truly amazing, Haley. I never knew you were multi-talented. :)
I loved the part about Sirius laughing because he didn't know how to cry; that's like his life in one sentence. Amazing.
Once again you've written a fic in which every line is so incredible and flawless that I felt the writing could go on forever, with a plot so good that I wanted it to.
Writing is superb.
Harry is way OOC.
Draco is not.
Loved it except OOC Harry.
Author's Response: Thank you!
I know he is, but I chose Harry intentionally.
I\'m glad to hear it.
Thank you.
1983. In a world where Voldemort has won the First War, where hope has fled from an Earth moaning under the Dark Lord's iron hand, marriages are broken and others are arranged in order to preserve the sacred purity of blood. James Potter loses his wife; now they have to find another for him.
Wow. I've really got to commend you on this story; you've come up with a fascinating concept and it's executed wonderfully. I'm really impressed with the restraint you've used with the plot, a slow build up that always leaves readers wanting more. This is the first fanfic that's held my interest for a while; usually I'm just too busy to read all the way through a story, but this one just sucked me in.
I discovered this through the QQ awards, and you definitely deserved runner-up(if not winner); this story deserves a lot more recognition than it currently has, congrats on your award!
Your writing style ranges from slightly inexperienced to nothing short of amazing, IMHO. You've got some real talent; the metaphors, the way you put together sentences, it's all way above average. A little more practice and I think you could be the best writer on here-- you're already outstanding! :D
It's all good, the plot and characterization and pacing and whatever, I'm hooked.
I'm dying to find out what happens next; rumour has it that this story is on hold? I hope that's not true; please keep going, you're amazing!!
Peace out
Hatusu
Author's Response: Thanks for the review; I\'m very proud that my fic was able to hold your interest, though it makes me all the more guiltier of not being able to update it for a while... Thank you for the congrats, too :). From what I\'ve understood, this fic very nearly won the award. Still, I\'m very happy with the runner-up position!
Your \"slightly inexperienced\" comment may be explained by the fact I\'m not writing in my native tongue... I\'ve been writing in English for a little less than a year, and I still need practice. I\'m glad you weren\'t discouraged by my occasional clumsiness.
Thank you, again, for the long and detailed review.Wow, this is a great one-shot. First of all, I love young Tom Riddle, and I agree with you that he wasn't born evil.
You had some beautiful imagery and diction in this fic... the ocean seemed at once beautiful and terrifying. And the song went perfectly with it.
Good job... I hope someday I'll be able to write a one-shot half as good as this. :D
Author's Response: Hi Hatusu :) Thank you very much! I\'m glad that you enjoyed, given our little discussion of one-shot vs chaptered ;)
Ah, well, that idea hasn\'t really been worked as much as it deserves, in my opinion. But I\'m quite glad that you agree with me :)
The song is really what started all this. It gave me the inspiration, and you could also that the idea also. Ah, the ocean :) ... I wanted to transport the reader to that cliff, but more importantly, to make him imagine that sea.
Aw, thank you very, very much for those very kind words :) ! I know you will, it\'s only about getting the right inspiration :)
Wow, this was excellent.
You really find a way to evoke a strong sense of time and place in your writing, and it draws readers in. The description was suberb.
"You don’t question the people that are supposed to love you and have supposedly done everything in the world for you. They don’t mess up, they don’t make mistakes. They’re faultless, and anything they’re blamed for is someone else’s fault. They’re not evil, everyone else is just a goody-goody."
I really like those lines, because they are so insightful and so true... they really sum up the way a child feels about his parents.
Keep writing, this was a pleasure to read. :D
Oooh this is really interesting! I like it a lot, and it's very original and well-written. Please write more, I can't wait to see how young-Harry and old-Harry will deal with each other!
Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks! More coming soon.
The things they carried were not always visible, or tangible. They were not always pocket-sized reminders or magical objects or wands or potions. They were not always spoken of.
But they were always there.
Ooh, very nice, I loved this piece, especially the bit about Neville and the bubblegum wrapper.
This is brilliant, but I think it would be wise to mention in your author's note that this was based off of the equally brilliant novel The Things They Carried, by Tim O'Brien. Because otherwise it would seem as if you were taking credit for an idea that wasn't originally yours. :)
Keep writing, you are amazing!
Hello there -- interesting story you've got here! I really like the way you've organized it, into different sections for different people; I think it gives the flow a nice continuity. I saw some typos and grammatical mistakes, but that's no big deal. If you don't already have a beta, getting one would probably help you out a lot. :)
Seems you have a good handle on everyone's character, especially Peter's, as he seems to want to spy both out of fear and a tiny little bit of pride/ambition. Good start, and I wonder what's in the vial Dumbledore gave to his brother?
I'm going to keep reading this; you keep writing, great job! :D
Cheers
Hatusu
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m so glad you have found your way here. Yes.. those pesky typos, etc. They have been looked over, but some seem to creep back in there. How do they do that? ;)
Hey Jules!
Wow... this fic is even better than I remember it being. It's all very well-written and the Ron/Hermione part is SUPER SWEET, not too cheesy or heavy and perfectly believeable. I'd say that's your greatest strength; you're really down-to-earth in writing, and you never write something silly or over-the-top. You've got great judgement.
Keep writing girly, I'll talk to you soon!
Cheers,
Maddy
Author's Response: Thanks Maddy! *hugs* You were a great beta. Seriously, you were amazing. I was hoping I didn\'t get too cheesy, because that drives me crazy, so thanks for helping me out!!
Hey there :)
Great story; I really enjoyed the finished product. You deal with a difficult subject in a really sensitive and realistic way. The last line is my favorite, of course... just perfect.
Keep writing! :D
Author's Response: Hi Hatusu, thanks very much for reviewing. Unfortunately I can\'t take all the credit for this wonderful story *bows to brilliant beta* Thanks!!!
Wow. This was justjust amazing. I am totally speechless. The realism coupled with the religious metaphor works so well; your descriptions are penetrating and powerful and true, especially how you described dying as not being a step-by-step process, but something messy and unpredictable.I wonder if the reactions Regulus had on each day correlated to something else, like events in Genesis or the seven stages of grief? I don't know much about either.
My favorite quote:
On the seventh day, he closes his eyes like the dutiful son returning home, like the prodigal lost boy coming back from Never Never Land, like Peter Pan all grown up.
So sad and pretty. I really love this one-shot; it's one of the deepest examinations of Regulus's mind I've ever seen, and so well written. You're truly brilliant; please keep writing.
Manu! 20 reviews for only the first chapter?! You're amazing, everyone loves it already. ;D I've never read a Rose/Scorpius fic before and I don't think there are many on here yet, so you'll be the first! I'm dying to find out what happens next. Your Rose and Scorpio remind me very much of Romeo and Juliet, even more than Ginny/Draco. I'm so proud to have helped you out with this fic, my dear; it's going to be huge. :D
Author's Response: Maddy!!! Thank ya! *huggles tightly* I\'m proud to have had YOUR help, my dear! *beams*
This is really, really good. I actually sort of love it. I think you've portrayed both brothers with great finesse. I've read few gauntlets that are so clear and cohesive. Congratulations on writing something so amazing; I think I'll go read more of your stories now. ;D
Author's Response: Awww... thank you. I'm very, very honoured that you think so highly of my fic. One of my favourite things to do is get into the heads of characters and I tried really hard to get a sharp contrast here between Regulus and Sirius, but still tie them together as young men fighting in the same war. Thanks again for reading and leaving such a wonderful review.