I am in the process of adding my stories back onto the site! I have done a little editing and some won't make it back here, but what does... and what I write from now on hopefully will pass your high standards!
I have done some tweaking to the chapters of Fawkes' Gifts and am now having to have them beta'd again. Please bear with me as this takes time between postings.
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Oh, I was astonished to find out that Hedwig's Tale was Podcasted! How cool is that? Thank you so much mudbloodproud for the nomination and thank you so much to Wendy/kiley the Mermuggle who read it so wonderfully.
Chapter nineteen was a little slow, but informative. I like how he is pretty much stuck being Ravenclaw.
The friendship between the Founders was mentioned several times in various places. Harry expecting them to not like Slytherin was probably just a reflex. He should have remembered they did like him until after the Chamber of Secrets was made.
Arguing over breakfasts, the trio? Oh you must be joking. Hermione doesn’t think she knows everything, does she? Really good chapter. Pace is picking back up. The diary scenes just kind of drag a bit. Not that they aren’t good, it’s just a little slow. But I am still interested so I will keep reading. See you at the end of chapter twenty- four.
This is definitely an Alternate Universe fic. I usually review at the end of the entire story, but with so many chapters in this one, I guess I need to review every three or four chapters. That way it won’t be two pages long.
Harry being depressed seems normal, but Petunia and Dudley are definitely way out of character. It is actually refreshing to see them written this way. I have always thought they had the capacity to be human. Glad you let it happen.
This is the first AU story I have gone looking for and read, and so far, I really like it. I have placed it on my favorites list, and I hope that as I finish what you already have posted it keeps getting better.
More reviews coming up in a few more chapters.
Oh you have definitely got me laughing again. Harry’s race to the Headmasters Office, and the subsequent astonishment of Dumbledore was hilarious! The portraits changed their tunes fairly quickly too. Phineas surprised me though; he thinks he owes an apology? Amazing. Harry letting Voldemort see the room wasn’t such a good idea after all. But now they know there is a way into the crypt they didn’t know about before. Bella will learn one day, no matter how much she wants Voldemort’s favor, she will never best Harry and his friends. I like how even though Harry is looking for Gryffindor, through Ravenclaw, he has to use Parseltongue. It has a certain symmetry, except so far no Badgers have attacked him.
I love the sniping between the portraits. It adds comic relief in what could get to be somewhat serious. I love that Dumbledore let Harry read it first. He is right, if it weren’t for Harry no one would be reading it. You have read Quidditch Through the Ages haven’t you? House Elves before enslavement?
All because Gryffindor wanted to marry an Ungifted One. Slytherin is just too much. No wonder his house spends so much time mouthing off about bloodlines. I can’t wait to see the reactions of the portraits to this.
Ginny hates to be left out of the good stuff doesn’t she? Oh the angst of jealousy, Ginny is so devious. The Library does seem like the likely place for a diary of Ravenclaw, she was purported to be the “smart” one. Madame Pince doesn’t like the fact that Harry could find something in her Library that she didn’t know was there. Dumbledore was right though; Harry is the key, in more ways than one. I think that Malfoy is the one who is letting the dark side know how Harry is progressing. Of course, this could be because I don’t like Malfoy and would like to see him get expelled. But hey, if it’s somebody else, I really can’t wait to see who. See you in three more.
Is the title of this chapter backwards for a reason? Hearts Desire is what I saw when I looked at it, but of course you have a reason, you wrote it. Let’s see if I can figure it out. Ron has never been good at espionage. Did you know that it is hard to read if you are laughing? I have had to re read several passages in the past forty chapters because I was laughing too hard to register what I was reading. Snape unwinding in a room that looks like it belongs to a teenaged girl? Mirror image of Hearts Desire right? I think they both saw girls. Ron saw Hermione, and Harry saw Ginny. His heart wants that to happen after Voldemort is gone. The future Lupin told him he could have.
Harry has never known what to do with females has he? The mirror showed him what he should have known all along, and I applaud you for bringing it to his attention this way. Even though I don’t particularly like the Mirror of Erised, I know that it has its uses. What is Hermione doing? Oh. Makes sense, if Harry is really interested he should have to lay it all out there and hop like hell that Ginny returns the sentiment. Nice way to not make it easy on him.
I knew Dobby would be the one to explain the enslavement. Tears are rolling down my face from laughing this time. Only Ginny could get Harry into that position and then leave him there wandless. Great idea. Blurting it out seems to be a trend with Harry, no matter what it is he is trying to say. The way you allowed a kiss to convince her was a good idea. Sometimes words aren’t enough, and something more is needed. I am impressed with both of them for knowing normal means wouldn’t get them the answers they wanted. See you after the next one.
I guess Nott has a reason for being in the DA. I hope you will tell us soon.
The way Ron reacts is just too funny. Harry called him on it pretty quick though. Just as I imagined he would.
I said it once and I will say it again; do not visit the sins of the father onto the sons. Nott is a better man than a lot of full-grown wizards. Most would continue to support their fathers and in turn Voldemort out of fear. I like that you have them fighting back.
Oh please don’t let the spy be Nott. I just don’t think I could handle being nice about a Slytherin, and then find out I was wrong.
Parseltongue saves the day once again. I am surprised that more people haven’t shown more reactions to this. None of the people that have been there when Harry uses Parseltongue have shown any outward reactions. Except for Madame Pince, but like I said then, it was probably only because he found something that she couldn’t. But I would think that even knowing he could do it, somebody would say something about it.
Anyway, now that I am caught up with you, I will be reviewing after every chapter. I just noticed the next one is in the queue, so hopefully it won’t take too long. Keep writing, I want to know who the spy is.
Fairly good story. Not sure I like the fact that you would have Harry almost hit Ginny though. He isn't the type of boy that would ever hit a girl. Unless her name was Narcissa or Bellatrix.
Why don’t other authors write Harry as a generous person? You wrote this from Ginny’s point of view, but it was about Harry and I really liked it. It definitely resembled thoughts my friends and I used to talk about when we liked a boy.
I really liked the way she noticed all of the things he does to make the people around him feel good, and have the things they want, and or need. It also went a long way in describing why she felt the way she does. And what it is she loves about him.
I really enjoyed this little story, and wanted to let you know you did a great job.
The Draco/Ginny stories really aren’t my thing, but hey, if that’s what some people like, great. I just skimmed most of this one, just to get the gist, and you did a great job on the writing. See you at another story soon.
You have an amazing imagination. I would like to commend you for giving others the spotlight. Too many forget that Harry would not be able to do anything close to what he does if it weren't for his friends.
Please write more fanfic. You are truly talented.
You have an amazing imagination. I would like to commend you for giving others the spotlight. Too many forget that Harry would not be able to do anything close to what he does if it weren't for his friends.
Please write more fanfic. You are truly talented.
That was a very good interpretation of the prophecy. I am not sure that I would go so far as to say that Voldemort is already dead and holding onto physical form though. I liked the way the final battle played out though. It was really good, and the life debts are rather strong magic.
The epilogue was really funny, but you didn’t tie up all of the loose ends. Such as was I right about Harry’s injuries being caused by Katie. And why in the world didn’t you let Harry go tell Sirius that the war was over. You didn’t even let him go tell the portrait about putting Bella back in jail. Maybe you have another sequel and I just haven’t found it yet. Maybe you are writing the next story in line, but I kind of feel cheated at the amount of information you have left out.
If you haven’t, or if you are not planning to, please reconsider and write the third story, or at least a one shot to finish the loose ends.
Anyway, other than all of that, you did a good job and I thank you for the entertainment.
I may be one of a very few, who believe that Dumbledore is not the greatest wizard to have ever lived. Sometimes I have referred to him as the man behind the curtain, (Wizard of Oz). He is the puppet master of the Order, and of Hogwarts. Never caring how many die, or are hurt, just so Harry can live and defeat Voldemort. All the while, asking for forgiveness for an old man’s mistakes. I wasn’t even that upset when he died in HBP.
I know Harry believes in him, but I wish and hope that somewhere in Deathly Hallows that J.K. allows his true colors to come to light. Whatever they may be.
The first six chapters here were very well written and I like that Harry is getting better at dealing with his grief. The wedding was funny, and the reception was great. Ron and Hermione Head Boy and Girl, who didn’t see that coming?
Harry and Katie getting engaged…Wonderful! So far you are doing a great job with this sequel, and I can’t wait to finish.
I am very glad you decided to write a Slytherin who isn’t a Death Eater wannabe. Most people write all of them as pure blood manic idiots.
Ron needs more of Dr. Ubbly’s Oblivious Unction applied to the scars on his arms. Thoughts do leave deeper scars than anything else, according to Madame Pomfrey. Anyway good chapters so far. Laughing a lot, and getting mad right along with the characters. Which means you are doing your job very well. Keep it up.
You have put so many things into this that I have no idea where to start, or finish for that matter. I really like Siobhan, and her friendship with Harry seems to be a good one. The Halloween Ball sounds like a good idea for inter-house unity.
Ron and Hermione seem to be falling apart at the seams. But then you have them break up. Why? I know that Ron can be a complete jerk at times, and a brainless oaf, when it comes time to be thoughtful. But when all is said and done, he really does love Hermione. Now I know that you have done some pairings that are not strictly canon, but that is one couple that deserve to be together, so I am begging you, please do not let them stay broken up for long.
Harry has been writing in his journal, but Katie hasn’t been writing back. Hopefully she will have written back soon and he can read a long letter from her. Also he needs to let Ron and Hermione in on the engagement.
Of course you have already finished this story and I am telling you things that I think should happen, which when you think about it doesn’t make much sense does it? So I guess I will just continue with the reviews, and stop with the advice.
There are worse things to think about than some girl kissing Harry.
Hermione having a date with a boy, who in HBP was definitely a blood purist, just seems strange. I know you made him different in this, but it’s just strange.
Ron typically acted jealous, and can’t get over the rivalry of Gryffindor/Slytherin.
Katie took the news rather well about Siobhan. And Harry taking all of her pain, I guess that’s why he cut his finger, and why his leg was hurt. I wonder if anyone will figure that out?
Just glad to see that Harry finally got the better of Bella and it meant she was captured. Let’s just hope she doesn’t find another way to escape.
In your authors notes you have said that you want the criticisms as well as the compliments. Well as far as compliments go, you are doing an excellent job, you have created original characters, and along with them you are portraying all of the original characters just as they should be. The plot is advancing, and the funny things are funny, the sad, are sad, etc.
The criticisms I have are small. The scenes are not flowing from one to the next. They have a static feel to them. And I am sorry, but the Order has way too many Aurors in it to allow Christopher Bell to remain free. He would have to be turned over to the Ministry.
I still like the story, and I am going to finish reading it, I can only hope that the static nature of the last few chapters was a fluke.
Made up animals? I tried to find the Granian, in the Lexicon, and in Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them. Couldn’t find it, so I am assuming that you made it up. If so, good one. I would like a little more information about it though.
Swords, bows and arrows, sledgehammers. What about guns, and other projectile weapons that are far more accurate, and deadly?
Dumbledore? Okay. He had to die sometime. I just hope the others are okay.
One more small criticism, there seem to be more typos and grammar mistakes as the story progresses. I can only assume that it is because you were typing faster to finish the story. Of course as my old Drill Sergeant once told me “When you assume, you make an ass out of u and me.” Maybe I am just too much of a nitpicker.
I enjoyed this story very much. I can't wait to read the next one.
Oh ---- Yeah! As much as I hate the reason for it, Harry and Charlie are great. And Snapes comment was hilarious. keep up the good work.
I have submitted my first chapter for my very first fanfic. It is titled "Fawkes' Gifts" and I hope that when or if it gets validated, you will come along for the ride. It's my version of book seven and should be in the AU section. Sorry, no other pairings, just canon ships. But I hope you will like it anyway. See ya!