First off, I had never read a Moody story before, and I think this story is spot-on characterization. There's a lot we don't know about this man, and I think this story does an accurate job of filling in the gaps of his personality. I read all three chapters in one go (so I'll probably reference all the chapters in a vague sort of order—many apologies). As much as I like the character of Moody, I've enjoyed the character of Elizabeth as well. They both seem very real, flaws and all.

Everything seems well thought out. I've enjoyed reading about the comings and goings of Mrs. Albright and her questionably existent son. It's the little details like this that really make this story stand out, I think. That and the ongoing conversations about rosebushes and fish. It certainly adds color to Moody and Elizabeth's friendship.

I thought the opening sequence of this chapter was very nice. The internal narration seemed appropriately disjointed and confused, considering Moody's physical state.

I'll second the enjoyment of the Poppy/puppy mixup.

He hadn’t laughed in at least ten months, shouldn’t be laughing now, really, and yet…

This line really stood out to me, as well as an earlier passing mention about never wanting to see his trunk again. That really a mystery about Goblet of Fire, isn't it? How horrible was it to be trapped in there, even if he was only aware of it for brief periods at a time?

All told, I've really had a good time reading these chapters, and can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review and I am so glad you like it! Moody fascinates me, and I can't imagine how he felt, knowing he was in that trunk and Barty Crouch was doing who knew what disguised as him. I can't imagine that he would just walk out of there feeling hale and hearty, no matter how amazing Poppy Pomfrey is. I'm glad you are looking forward to the next chapters.

Again, great chapter! I'm finally all caught up now, and can't wait to read more. The ending with the changing of the headmasters was another nice Order of the Phoenix tie-in.

“And so you know, Miss Turpin,” Professor Snape confided in her, “the crossword puzzle was highly amusing, although I’m not sure I wish to know how you found out Gregory Goyle still wets the bed.”

“As a journalist, I can’t ethically reveal my sources,” she told him smugly.

I loved that part. Also, I got a kick out of Morag being so pleased with her potential hand scar. As long as that sentence was, it must've taken up a lot of space!

As I've been reading these chapters, the thought hit me: how are they paying to print the paper? Lisa's brother is nice enough to do the work for free, but I think the price of paper and ink costs could eventually pose a problem, considering how often they go to press. Despite having the quality and durability (but not softness) of toilet paper, newsprint can be surprisingly expensive. Maybe this could be somehow incorporated later.

Author's Response: Hm, you've given me yet another detail to ponder. This will definitely be something I'll have to consider.

I second Natida. I loved your take on Neville, and it was great to get inside his head for a chance. He's a leader, but he still admits that long-held and very real fear of Snape (and for good reason). In addition to the characters, I think you captured the dreary mood of Hogwarts very well.

Author's Response: Well, I'm glad you like this story. I have to admit, Neville is a fun character to write. I may have to do more stories about him.

I'll second everyone else to say that you really write description well. It makes your world so lively and real. What I like about it is that it is not dry description; it's description through action. In my mind, nothing's better than a strong verb.

The shop front was small and relatively uninteresting. It was dingy and the brown paint was cracked and peeling. A large sign, written in chipped antique style letters read “Dargen’s Antiques”. Rain was hitting the roof of the shop and running into the rusty gutters; it had already filled them to the brim, and was now cascading down the wall, creating a mini waterfall out of the shop front. The shop was run down; there were plants, now being battered by the downpour, growing from the cracks in the stone and the telephone number underneath the shop’s name was so eroded it was barely legible.

I really enjoyed this paragraph because it's packed with a lot of action verbs because of the rain, but I like how in the same paragraph, you brought the curious, old building to life as well. I'm very interested to see where this story is headed.

(On a very off-the-beaten-path comment, I'd also have to second Jenna's sentiments about getting her hair done for an event. What a chore! Especially if the event — like a wedding — only lasts thirty minutes.)

Here's one thing I noticed that you might want to think about, and it's a very, extremely minor thing. I noticed that many paragraphs start with the word "Jenna." Granted, she's the only named character in the chapter, but maybe you can find ways to shake up to break up the opening repetition a bit.

It's a very different kind of story, which makes it very enjoyable. I haven't read too many stories featuring a major Muggle character. I'm excited to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review Racer! I am so shocked that you all like my description! Lol I always used to hate writing description, but I am starting to like it more and more now! I alway see it as some can draw, some can desribe.. it seems only fair lol. Haha I agree about the hair thing, although really I like nothing better thanhaveing my hair fancy! I will go back and look at the start of the paragraphs :) and will definately watch out for it in my next chapter! I love having a muggle as a main character, she is someone we can all relate to, and she is lots of fun to write! Russia xxxxx

Great story! I thought you did a good job of writing with older, more elegant language (which in these modern days, we all too often lack).

Aside from that, I think you really excelled in the construction of the story. The conversation starts on begrudgingly friendly terms and gathers a full head of steam by story's end. I liked Slytherin; you gave him appropriate — or at least understandable — reasons to be resistant to Muggle interference.

Author's Response: I just finished beta'ing your story =P. Thank you so much for the review! It was written quite a while ago... I should check this more often! It's so nice to hear that you liked my story! I had a really hard time writing it, and kept getting writer's block ever five minutes. Thank you so much for your kind words!

I haven't read much in the way Tonks/Lupin fics, but I thought this was absolutely fantastic. It was charming and sweet without going overboard on the cuteness. It's a tough line to walk. I thought you picked a very good "untold story" that suited an all-dialogue challenge well. I think half the battle for the Gift of Gab is picking a tale that can be easily told by conversation.

Anyway, I really liked your portrayal of Tonks. She's a fun character, isn't she? You made her very lively, and I enjoyed the whole side story about wrestling the squid. That seems like such a plausible thing, knowing her!

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. When the restriction was put in no Marauder Era, I was at a loss. So, I got to write a Marauder and include a bit of Marauderishness in my story. If you haven't read it yet and are looking for a great Remus/Tonks fic, I would suggest Carole's (Equinox Chick) Apparently Asleep. Thanks again, Terri