oooh, i LUV the song Mr. Brightside, it's on my mp3 player; thats why i read the story in the first place, but it's REALLY good!!!!!!!!!!! I luv how u can c everyone's perspective. I want 2 know what will happen! Keep going! 10!!

Ahh... that was so sweet! I loved Ginny's character. Running outside and shouting seems like something she would do. I also loved how you captured her thoughts, and made it so that she was angry, but it was romantic all the same. I also loved how Neville just kissed her, without saying anything about it. he seemed pretty shy, which was very Neville-ish. I loved this! I give you an imaginary 10. Happy writing!

~ lily_evans34 aka mrs_tom_riddle

Author's Response: Thank you so much for that wonderful review. I\'m really glad you liked it. *Bathes in the light of the imaginary 10*

Aww... that was so sad! I nearly cried! That was such a great story. 100/10

Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Looks like someone did their research! I usually don't care much for historical information in writing, but you really had me hooked! And I'm not just saying that! Was all that information about the holiday real, or did you make some up? I thought that it was really interesting. I can really see their relationship progressing. I think that characterization is by far your strong point in this fic. A few nit-picks:

“That’s all we need.” Merope cut in, trying to get straight to the point so they could leave this blonde-haired-beauty. She always hated it when Tom talked to other women.

First, I would use a comma after she speaks, because cutting in is explaining what she's doing when she speaks. Also, I would say 'Merope' at the start of the new sentence, because I was under the impression that you were talking about Sara.

At any rate, lovely chapter, Shayla! *Skips off to read next one*

Author's Response: Haha, have fun with the next chapter. And, this is a real holiday. This story was originally written for theTerm Challenge a few months ago where you had to put a pairing in a different country. All the translations, holiday facts, and things of the like are acurate. Even the name of the hotel is a real one in Romania.

Aww, that's so sad! I feel so bad for Merope! I think that him being angry is very realistic. I like how you mentioned how the last of the Amorentia had drained out of Tom. I thought that was a very original take on it-- I had always seen it as: Drink the potion and you're in love. Don't drink it, and you're not anymore. I think that twinge of love that Tom still had for Merope was very interesting.

He grabbed Merope’s hand and ran outside dragging Merope behind him.

In this sentence, I would change a 'Merope' to 'her' so it doesn't sound redundant.

Midnight found Merope lying half-asleep in her bed with tears streaming down her face.

Hehe. I loved the sentence. I had to re-read it several times, because I kept thinking that you meant my cat, Midnight. At first I was like 'Wait a second, my cat's in this?' Teehee.

Anyway, I thought that this was excellent. Can't wait to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: Yes, I love using inanimate objects as the subjects of sentences like \"midnight\". I\'m glad you liked that. Thanks for the review!

Wow, I'm so sad it's over! That story was such a joy to read! I like how you had Merope run into Tom. I was always under the impression that they never saw each other again, but I thought that was interesting. The ending was so sad; even though she was Voldemort's mother, I couldn't help feeling sorry for her. I think you wrote her final moments very realistically, and I loved the last paragraph. It's so eerie to think that Merope died loving Tom, just like Lily died loving Harry.

Nit-pick: She again had to several breaths before continuing,

I think you want a 'take' in there after 'to'.

Overall, a truly wonderful story. I'm so sad it's over! I guess reading another story by you will have to suffice! =)

Author's Response: Haha, thanks. I\'m always happy to hear that authors are sad to see a story end. It\'s one of the best compliments. Thanks for all the great reviews!

Wow, Shayla, that was amazing. Barty Crouch Jr. is one of my favorite, and coincidentally long fogotten about characters. I just love reading fics about him! Anyway, my nitpicks are as follows:

I was doing so that would be the problem.

I think you mean 'It was doing so...'

He thinks that he can just talk to Winky as if he in the kind of the world, Barty thought furiously. Well, he's not, and I'm going to show him that. If I only had a wand right now... He saw one sticking out of Harry's pocket. Perfect. Let's see if the foolish boy can even notice if his wand' missing. He lunged forward, hoping that Winky was preoccupied, and snatched the wand from Harry's pocket. Grinning, he twirled it absently in his hands. This wand meant freedom, and it was all part of the plan.

I think that part came on a bit quickly. I found it a bit unbelievable that he finds a wand the second after it crosses his mind. Instead of flat out saying that there was one in Harry's pocket, I would mention him realising that he was in a room full of wizards, and looking around a moment before he sees it. Just so that's it's more believable. Just a personal opinion, though!

Other than that, it was lovely!

Without so much as a second thought, he yelled into the air "MORSMORDRE!" Suddenly, a green jolt of light erupted from the end of the wand, protruding into the sky a Dark Mark. Barty quickly dropped the wand and Disapparated, leaving the wand behind. He would not be caught-- not again.

This was my favorite part as well. I could practically feel his need to not get caught again. It was wonderfully written!

Absolutely amazing job, dear!

Author's Response: I\'m not surprised that so many people liked that last paragraph. I wanted to make sure it was just right-- and I\'m glad you thought it was.

I have no idea what I meant on the first part, but I\'ll go check it out and try to fix it. Thanks!

That was superb. I loved how you captured Sirius's emotions and whatnot. This was very well written, though I do agree with Neville_is_my_hero about that one grammar line. This was very entertaining, while not nessisarily action packed. I loved how you wrote Sirius's emotions when he found James and Lily dead. You also did a wonderful job explaining his actions and portraying his character. Wonderful job, all in all! I read the second chapter, and I think that an epilouge would be great! While not nessisary, I think that it would be VERY entertaining to read. I would read another chapter to this great story! Good job and happy writing!

~Lily_evans34 aka mrs_tom_riddle

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review, and I\'m extremely glad you liked/ like the story. Since we all know what happens, in the end, I\'m very glad you were entertained and enjoyed it. If you\'ll look closely, the line is \'Remus had shown HIM once at Remus\'s house\'. The \'him\' in the sentance is Sirius, of course, and if I put another pronoun in the sentance it will get very confusing. The first part of the epilogue is up. I hope you enjoy it as well as you\'ve enjoyed the first part of the story! Thank you for reading, and keep reviewing!

I hate running into walls! (Literally and with writing.) That's what's happening in with about 5 of my stories, so I can sypathize. Best wishes for your fic!!!

Wow, that was... amazing. You successfully made me burst into tears and sob for a straight ten minutes, then call up my friend, and have her read this, and sob for a straight ten minutes. Seriously, though, this was great. Your imagery and explanations were beautiful. Your first two paragraphs are a wonderful example of that, and they set the stage for the rest of the fic very well. You use a very impressive vocabulary, and the descriptions you use are great. From the first sentence, you feel the ominous mood of this story.

In contrast to the restless storm brewing above him, the occupant of cell #6580 showed so little signs of life that any casual observers would have thought him to be dead. This was not true, however. As corpselike as his appearance was, Draco Malfoy was very much alive -- if not uncommonly motionless.

I loved that paragraph. One thing though; I would write out ‘number’ instead of using a number sign. It may just be a personal preference, but it just seems more official when written that way.

The weight of the chains attached to the hackles on Draco's wrists and ankles slowed him down and made it feel as though each step he took was being done under water.

Do you mean, ‘attached to the shackles’? I don’t think ‘hackles’ is appropriate to use in this sentence.

Draco had jumped to his Lord's defence, and thoughts of the brown-haired girl soon became buried beneath everything else clouding his mind.

Spelling error: ‘Defence’ should be ‘defense’.

The Dementors were excited -- they sensed a change, they knew death was about to be handed to them on a silver platter.

In this sentence, I would change ‘excited’. Maybe ‘eager’ or something. Again, it’s possibly a personal preference, but excited is not something that I would necessarily associate with Dementors. It just doesn’t seem like quite the right word.

The execution room is cold and much smaller than the room in which my trial was held. There's a little circle cleared in the centre of it with a chair -- just one chair -- and enough space for me to extend my hands out on either side of me without hitting anything. However, the rest of the room is filled with people. Old men, young Aurors, other Ministry workers, prisoners granted permission to come here -- they're all here to watch me die. I'm just an entertaining show to them.

Here, you change POVs. Before, you were saying ‘Draco’ and ‘he’ but now you start saying ‘I’. Did you mean to do that? I think it was intentional, but I’m just double checking. If not, then you should probably fix that. If it was, could you make it a bit more clear, somehow? I’m not sure how, but it was a bit confusing to me…

I struggle to yell, but my voice is unheard. I can hear the Dementors' rattling breaths drawing nearer. Gathering my last ounce of strength, I try to form pictures, images, memories in my mind from the mist clouding my consciousness. It's hopeless; all that's left of me is regret, hate, fear, desolution...but then I manage to construct the faint outline of her face, and suddenly it's enough. Tearing my head out of the hands holding it back, I open my mouth, tasting my own tears, and whisper hoarsely, 'Goddamnit, Hermione, I love you...'

I love this part. It was so well written, and well, quite sad. Here I started crying. This was really well written.

Years after the Kiss was performed on Draco Malfoy, another prisoner was transferred to his vacated cell. However, he was soon moved out after complaining about his sleep being penetrated by the sound of sobbing and the walls being so covered with proclamations of love that he could not glance at them without getting a headache. Azkaban officials examined his complaints and concluded that they were entirely unfounded, as the walls were untouched and the neighbouring cells were empty. The prisoner was shortly afterwards pronounced mad, but after the incident, cell #6580 was never put to use again.

I love the eerie note you left this story on. It was so creepy, and sad at the same time.

Overall, I thought that this story was really wonderful. I absolutely loved your descriptions, and your story line. Great job!