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01/12/07

Reviews by ciscomom

The slap by Solika

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Ron finds Hermione writing a letter to Viktor. He starts a row with her (again), but this time Hermione is a little more aggresive..

Review, pleaaase!!

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 06/08/07 Title: Chapter 1: What's his problem

How long did it take you to write this? The story idea is good but your sentence structure is so choppy it is difficult to read in places. In addition, you use the wrong words very often which is quite off putting. I'm surprised your Beta didn't have you correct this. Nothing ruins a good idea like carelessness.

The Time is Now by Hermione816

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The most succinct summary ever!! My "Book 7" told with revolving POVs from Hermione, Ron and Harry's perspectives. It's got it all! Romance, mystery, intrigue, Horcruxes, humor, international travel, house-elves, new characters, Voldy, the Burrow, and at least one wedding...

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 01/31/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Midsummer Night's Musings

This is truly one of the best fan fics I have read. The new characters fit right in and are not at all contrived for forced. I am eagerly waiting for the next chapters. You are a good writer - I hope you write "non Potter" stores as well; it would be a shame not to use your talent.

Author's Response: Hi. Thanks so very very much for your review! There\'s a new chapter in the queue right now, actually it\'s been languishing there for almost a week, and I bet my readers are chomping at the bit. As for my other writing endeavours - yes, I do lots of writing on my own (am even working on a novel-length project right now) - haven\'t been published, but hey, I really just enjoy writing for the sake of writing! I work in the publishing industry, so writing is also a part of everyday life for me! Thanks very much for taking the time to review and for your encouraging words!

3 A. M. Confessions by msbigbad

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Over 3500 reads and counting!!! _____Okay so I had said this was to become my version of book seven but I just don't like that they are already together I want to develop that over a series if I'm going to write one, not smack dab at the beggining so I will post the sequel to this story and that will be it. I will write a book seven but I want it to be better than what this story allows!! So look for Harry Potter and the Final Riddle later!! The sequel to this story (5 A.M. Revelations) has been validated sp please go read!
Summary:
It's late at the Burrow the night after Bill and Fleur's wedding and Hermione has alot of things on her mind that she needs to get out. Will a certain redhead be able to help her or will he be as cluless as ever? Please Review!! this is my first HP fic!

Please look at the banner I made for this story!! it's on my author profile!!

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 01/23/07 Title: Chapter 1: 3 A. M. Confessions

This was a sweet story - my only confusion was near the end where Hermione takes a step toward Ron - they had been sitting down at the table. A little thing, yes, but one that can distract the reader from the story as it plays out. Makes one wonder "when did they stand up - what did I miss"?

Harry Potter and the End of Darkness by JPLBMX

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: The trio go to the Muggles after the funeral, but on the train ride home will one red-head decide to come with them after learning of their plans?

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 01/31/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning of the End

I don't think the other reviewers read the same story I just read; they seemed to like it. I think this story is poorly constructed and what plot there seems to be is weak and seems to exist only as a means to get Harry and Ginny into bed.

John Doe and the Wizards' Society by hallie_p

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: John Doe's appearance in Burwell was one of the few exciting things that had ever happened in this tiny town, and everyone wanted to know everything about him from his real name to how he got a peculiar lightning shaped scar on his forehead.

But five years later John still can't remember a thing. So when a stranger shows up with tales of magic and wizards, and a wand like John had the night he appeared in Burwell, John is willing to forget the eerie feelings this man invokes with the hope of finally remembering who he is.

The seventh and final chapter is just waiting approval.

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 03/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: John Doe

What a wonderful start! You had me interested from the beginning - please update soon - I can't wait to read what happens and to find out who the "stranger" is.

I Wish You Knew by MagicalMe831

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: "I wish you knew. I wish you knew everything that I keep inside. I wish I could tell you everything that has welled up inside of me. The things that are on my mind. You sit there as though there is nothing that bothers you; like you’re carefree. It’s rather annoying, actually."
A short fic told from Hermione's point of view.

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 03/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: I Wish You Knew

This is a lovely story. We usually think of Ron as being tongue-tied and messing up all the time but I think deep down this is who he is. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thank you!

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Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 09/20/07 Title: None

I know you are young, but I thought you would have learned proper spelling and grammer by this time. Improper language usage can ruin a potentially good story.

A Thousand Ways to Win a Witch's Heart by poisonapple

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary:
Can a book really help Ron win Hermione's heart?

Ron Weasley has liked Hermione Granger for quite some time. There's only one problem: she doesn't know it yet.

It's their sixth year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry and Ron is finally ready to confess his feelings to her.

But a new heartthrob roams the halls, and he seems to have his eye on Hermione. And it turns out that she has his eye on him, too.

With the help of a magical book, Ron will try to win Hermione's heart, before somebody else does.

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 07/11/08 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Lines

A little thing, but if Ron is in sixth year, Fred and George would have left Hogwarts already - even if they hadn't left in Ron's fifth year.

Also, I think you have used too many unnecessary adjectives.

Hopelessly Devoted by saveginny417

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: There are some people that get everything they want from life. There are some people who don't. This is the story of two of those unfortunate people who didn't.

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 01/24/08 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

too far fetched to ever be taken seriously

Author's Response: Yes, it probably is. But you have to remember I wrote this way back before DH, when that whole Ron\'s Evil Anagram conspiracy thing was everywhere. I think that\'s what inspired this, to be honest.

Admiration by lily_evans34

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: The day after the Last Battle as Ron counts his losses, Hermione reminds him what was worth fighting for in the first place.

Reviewer: ciscomom Signed
Date: 01/28/08 Title: Chapter 1: Admiration

very nice!!

Author's Response: glad you liked it!