11/06/04
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Hi, I'm Josh and I am a part-time fanfiction writer. I'm also a mod, so if you have any questions, feel free to contact me.
I randomly get plot bunnies that I experiment on and then they die. I have many bunny graves in my backyard. *points* Anyhoo....*whistles*
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Date: 11/08/04 Title: None
This is a REALLY well written story!! Sort of sad that Hermionie is leaving in 7th year though.....:( Write faster!! :) i can't wait for the rest!!!
Author's Response: Yes... Dearest Hermione is being a pain over her school work. Are you thinking she needs to prioritize, perhaps?
Date: 11/08/04 Title: None
Love this story!!! Bubmed about Hermionie leaving though...:( Hurry up and write! :) I'm eager for the rest!
Author's Response: It's coming asap!
Hermione's Scrapbook by Seren
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: There is darkness that envelopes the world. It shrouds us and keeps us from ever seeing even what's in front of our noses. But for every Hitler, Grindelwald, Attila the Hun and Voldemort, Fate gives us a person to light a candle to shatter the darkness. Hermione Granger knows a hero when she sees one. Sometimes, you just have to look a little deeper.
Date: 12/19/04 Title: Chapter 1: Hermione's Scrapbook
Not exactly my kind of story, but touching all the same. I like haw you used the scrapbook to extract Hermione's feelings from her. The second person (if there such a thing?) made the story a little confusing, a little different, and a little more interesting to read. I liked it; wow that story really got to me.....(in a good way...)
Molly & Arthur - The Beginning by GringottsVault711
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: It's Molly Prewett's fifth year - and her and the lovable-but-odd Arthur Weasley have been made Gryffindor Prefects. Molly begins to wonder if there's more to the way Arthur feels about her than she's ever realized.
Date: 04/03/05 Title: Chapter 2: Chattings About Children
Great chapter! I am really starting to like this story very much. I think that you did Molly and Arthur much better this time around. ;) Well, firsst, towards the end I saw several little spelling errors that you would have missed if you we'rent paying attention to it. Second, I thought that in the beginning, thestory was a bit unconnected. Not ca't understand it connected, but more...it wasn't running smoothly along. It seemed abrupt. But that was just in the beginning of the chapter, so no worries. Also, and this might only be because I haven't read the first chapter in two weeks, I was a little confused on some of the characters. For example, I have no idea who Shane is...must read the first chapter again...ah well. I like how you are using Maeve in the story, like someone to prod Molly and Arthur's relationship further. But I was a little suprised that you put all these members from the Order in the story, especially Moody. I have always pictured him much older, as I did the rest of the group. I pictured them as a wider range of ages, most of them a lot youger then the Weasley's. Anyway, great chapter, and I will ocntinue reading it. :)
Date: 05/29/05 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Library Research
Er...yeah. I haven't read this tory in a while, so I don't remember much about it. Oh well. :P I thought that it was a good chapter, and fun as well. It was a bit short, but I can deal with that. ;) Anyway, first off, I like how you had thoughts between the ramblings of Binns (if...that's what they were) and thought it was a good way of expressing thoughts. I also liked the scene at the end. The only thing I have to critisize is that the last scene was a bit disconnected, to me anyway. I think it could've have flown together better in some way. *shrugs* Good chapter. :)
Date: 04/03/05 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Competition
Another great chapter. I just have a question: was the distraction, I think it was, Molly agreeing to go to Hogsmeade with Amos? And that brings me to something else. I'm glad that you are bringing many of the adult characters into the story as kids, but I would say not to over do it. If you bring the whole adut cast into the story, it will look a bit crowded, like you're trying to write all of them at once, which ca be confusing. Also, I like how you are portraying Moody, but I thought that he became paranoid about dark wizards and such after he became a Auror...oh well. And one other thing. The things with Amos seemed a little abrupt compared to the smoothness of the previous chapters. One of the things that I really enjoyed however, was the mini-argument between Molly and Maeve about Arthur and stuff. I thought that was very well written. Good job.
Date: 03/13/05 Title: Chapter 1: Prefects & Fellytones
Maeve? Hmm...I don't really know how to react to this story. I liked the set up and the scene and the events, but since we haven't seen any of Molly and Arthur as teenagers, I want to say that they are OOC, because I am so used to a much older version of the couple. It was a little awkward to read because of that. also, try to not repeat words a lot. In one instance I rememebr that you usesd prefect three times in three sentences. I did think it was a good story though. I thought you did very well for a first chapter (though it was a little bit short) I think I'll read the rest of the story...
Author's Response: Prefect three times? Grr... I never noticed that. But then again, there isn't really another word for prefect, is there? Thanks for the review, though. I tried to keep Molly & Arthur in there characters as much as possible, but in a more youthful way - I think it's clearer as the chapters go on. It's really the last half of the story that will leave you with a permanent smile on your face (I know this because I recently had a crazy urge to read all 10 chapters...) Thanks again for the review...
The Confessions of Lord Voldemort by Master Wolf
Rated: •Summary: A look at how Voldemort really feels.
Date: 11/12/04 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One
Very funny!! Hilarious!! Keep writing!! :)
Date: 12/09/04 Title: None
Very interesting! I really like it a lot! Keep writing!!
Date: 12/09/04 Title: None
REALLY GOOD!!! I really like it!! Make it super long so i'll have something to read :) (by the way, the first time Dumbledore talks, it says Hell instead of Hello)
Author's Response: omg...I didn't even...really? Noone told me this!!! ok, well hoprfully everyone will know what I was talking about! lol
Date: 12/09/04 Title: None
Ooooo...I wonder what's going to happen next...? It's really great!! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!
Veiled Revelations by erikthephantom
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: The Hogwarts Express brings mystery and mischief in the Marauders' seventh and final year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. James, Sirius, Remus, and Peter are facing a year of N.E.W.T.s, romance, intrigue, and, of course, a little mischief-making. There are plot twists galore! James (in the midst of saving the world) continues desperately to try to woo the incorrigible Lily Evans. Sirius deals with family problems while dealing with his incredible popularity and good looks (the horror!). Remus is provided with a backdoor to avoiding the prejudices of the inevitable real world, but at what cost? (dun-dun-dun) And Peter...well, Peter gets himself a girlfriend (but don't worry: it doesn't affect his hero-worshipping of James...or DOES IT?!)
Date: 12/06/04 Title: Chapter 1: Head Boy, Head Girl
I love it!!! I really like ur perception of the Mauraders. I can't wait to read the rest! I especially like the flashbacks (but don't over do it). I'm really excited to see what you are going to do with the characters! And also, (if no one minds...) I am going to advertise my story here: A Day In the Life of Cornelius Fudge! it is my first fac fic, so please read and review! Thanks!
Author's Response: i will read it! i give you my word! (and review it too, of course ;) ) and i promise i wont overdo the flashbacks...i didnt think i had already...but i will keep that in mind! (except for th idea for the chapter AFTER the fight is oveR)
What Are We Waiting For? by GwendolynJames
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Malfoy attacks Hermione, so Ron steps in to rescue her.
Date: 04/24/05 Title: Chapter 1: What Are We Waiting For?
*gaspshockdieatbrilliantfic* That was amazing! I really enjoyed the change in POV's all the time. I also thought that the third person parts were very well done and really IC. The otehr parts however, were a little bit OOC. i don't know exactly why, but it just seemed that way. Maybe because it's the first time we're heaing stuff from inside the trios' heads...*contemplates* Anyway, I really enjoed this whole thing, especially the ending. I loved Harry's reaction to the whole thing. Hehe. This was great, Joy. :)
Studying Isn't Everything by smokeline
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: A view into Hermione's diary shows the human that resides behind the bookworm. PG-13 for language. Note: This fic was completed before the release of HBP, so it will only follow through OOTP canon.
Date: 11/10/04 Title: Chapter 1: Studying Isn't Everything
Very interesting (and weird)...but I like it! Keep writing
Date: 03/12/05 Title: None
*does R.Hr tribal dance* Yay! I liked it and how it was put in poem-ish form. I was really excited about how it was going to end and what was going to happen. I was sort of intrigued by your summary and then even more so when I saw it was a one-shot, and I had to read it. I didn't really think the ending was a suffieciet way to end the story though. It was cliched a little bit. Not to the degree of a lot of fics, though, which is a good sign. ;) Great job. *contiues tribal dance*
Author's Response: I must learn this tribal dance... Thanks for the review, hon. I ended it that way because, well... it felt right. Don't know how else to explain it. I'm glad you were intrigued by the summary, and that you found yourself lured into The Vault ;) *goes to find choreography of tribal dance*
Caffeine High by Chaos Illusion
Rated: •Summary: Various HP characters get drunk or high on sugar/caffeine/whatever (as long as it's legal!). Insanity follows. No one's in character. Very random.
Date: 11/12/04 Title: Chapter 1: Harry, Ron, and Hermione
Really funny! I loved it! Keep writing!
Date: 11/12/04 Title: Chapter 2: The Marauders
Not as good as the first one...but still great!! Keep writing!
Harry's Sixth Year by GringottsVault711
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Harry's sixth year; the burden of the prophecy, the grief over the loss of Sirius, the wizarding war, blossoming romances, the new Quidditch Captain, Weasley family drama - and that's just part of it.
Date: 03/26/05 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: The Secret Truth
R.Hr! Ginny.Dean! Yay! No! Possible Harry.Ginny! [/end shipping] I liked this chapter, thought it was rather short. I smiled when I read the first part about Dean. That's just like Ron and Mr. Weasley.. But I don;t think that Arthur would leave his muggle relations job. He loves muggles too much. You were almost contradicting your last paragraph about him loving muggles. Other than that, it was a good, calm, but interesting chapter. Godd job. 8/10
Date: 03/06/05 Title: Chapter 1: The Wedding
It was Hermione! Whoo hoo! ;) That was a short chapter, so I don't have too much too say...I thought it was good except that the wedding was sort of random. But it was convincing. I really thought that we was attending a wedding. Good job on that. Ron seemed a little OOC though. Mostly because he hugged Harry, something we normally wouldn't do, and that he openly said that he missed Hermione. That is something Ron wouldn't do, since he lurves Hermione. ;) Good job, though. Gotta love that R.Hr lovin! 8/10
Author's Response: Thanks... yeah, I kind of despise the first several chapters of this story... but once you get to about chapter 45, it gets pretty good. Haha. Thanks again.
Date: 03/04/05 Title: None
:: sigh :: R.Hr. Wonderful. Just wonderful. This is only like the third romance fic I've read, and I think that it is perfect. And having it be a one-shot helpes a lot. I like one-shots better than chaptered fics. I thought that the tension that Ron had during the story was perfect, just like he would act in the books. And Hermione was good too. Suspicious, but not OOC. But I think that the carridge was a little bit off. It seems too Cinderalla-ish. And I wish it had been a little longer. Other than that....really really good. 9/10
Author's Response: Thanks... you didn't like the carraige? Oh, but it's supposed to be like a fairytale! :) Appreciate the review ;)